Six Sentence Sunday – 7/8/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. Last week we saw the hero’s cravat sail away in the breeze as he’s approaching in a hot air balloon. I’ve skipped his landing and his introducing himself to the heroine:

Her eyes dropped to the faux pas in his attire, the lack of cravat. She’d never seen a man’s throat and collarbone before. Well, except her father’s and he didn’t count. Her heart gave an extra little thump. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her as to what lay beneath his shirt.

Strong-looking fingers fiddled with the collar at his throat, attempting to close the gap.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

IN OTHER NEWS: MUST LOVE BREECHES finaled in the Celtic Hearts RWA chapter contest, the Golden Claddagh, in the paranormal category this past week!

To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here.

Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! 

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38 Comments

  1. Who knew a man’s neck could elicit the same response as a woman’s ankles in the elizabethan era :-) … a funny scene. His discomfort was well illustrated.

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  2. He’s practically naked! Scandalous! Lol!

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  3. SO cute . . . if only we could return to that type of innocence in today’s society!
    P.S. Love the new look of your blog:-)

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  4. Shocking show of flesh. Definitely captures the era. Great six!

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  5. Great scene and description.

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  6. Jessica Subject

     /  July 8, 2012

    A cute six to draw me into the world. Well done! And I like the new look of your blog! :)

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  7. I really like that you said she’d never seen a man’s collarbone before. That’s something different.

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  8. First let me say I love the new look! Second, I love your six! Puts me in mind of a certain tall British actor with a shirt that’s partly open, in a field at dawn.

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  9. Well, it serves him right if she jumps his bones right there. Honestly, walking around with his neck and collarbone showing like that! ;-) Great six!

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  10. Love the new look, Angela! Also love the little peek-a-boo play with this excerpt. Reels us right in! Great 6!

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  11. I love your attention to detail!

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  12. Cool six, Angela! Very much in keeping with the era. Her excitement feels very natural. And I love how you say just enough to give me a clear visual!

    And I think your new blog look rocks, too.

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  13. Love the new look for the blog! And I am surely enjoying the unfolding of this story – great six today!

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  14. Congrats on Breeches!! I can see how those tiny black hairs would be absolutely mesmerizing if the dress of the day forbade exposure of such in polite company.

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  15. Enticing six that conjured a lovely image. Her reaction is perfect!

    Congrats on finaling in the Golden Claddagh with MUST LOVE BREECHES, and I love the new decor of your blog!!

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  16. Oh terrific. I love how this is progressing.

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  17. only one comment–well done!

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  18. Love the new look and all it’s dimensions and congratulations on the contest.
    Fab 6. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her<– love this, teasing her :)

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  19. LOVE the new look and your six. AND huge congrats on finaling!

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  20. I love your new page design! It’s refreshing to see how an exposed throat and collarbone were considered sensual and thrilling once upon a time.

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  21. Congrats on the contest. And yes, what is scandalous exposure is very much dictated by social norms. It’s leading to a lot of conflict today (e.g., headscarves.)

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  22. Congrats on finaling in the contest, Angela, and here’s to a win!! I love that story. As for this one: Totally groovin’ on the heroine’s sexual awareness/awakening and the hero’s upright reaction to her perusal. Great six!!

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  23. Seduction by a man’s throat? Awesome, Angela. Loving the sound of this story so far.

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  24. I absolutely love this! I just put you on my TBR list. Thanks for sharing.

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  25. Swoon. How racy. Fab stuff, Angela. Your new look is gorgeous as well. :)

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  26. I really like the line about her having never seen a male throat/collarbone before. It’s an excellent way of reminding the reader about the timeline. Great six.

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  27. lvoisin

     /  July 8, 2012

    Great six! Very fun!

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  28. laurakayeauthor

     /  July 8, 2012

    I really enjoyed this! Great showing! And congrats on the contest final!

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  29. Shocking. I love a man’s neck.

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  30. siobhanmuir

     /  July 9, 2012

    I liked the last line. I really brought his discomfort into focus. Good six, Angela. :)

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  31. J.M. Blackman

     /  July 9, 2012

    Love the details here. You’ve convinced me his neck showing IS scandalous, so, you’re fantastic. I love it. Congratulations on the contest final. You rock.

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    • J.M. Blackman

       /  July 9, 2012

      And your new layout is bad-ass. I’m a fan.

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  32. The new novel sounds like fun! And congratulations on making the finals with Must Love Breeches!!

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  33. The new blog design is wonderful! And congrats on another contest final — you’re on a roll here! I love this snippet, especially their heightened awareness of each other. :)

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