Six Sentence Sunday – 7/8/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. Last week we saw the hero’s cravat sail away in the breeze as he’s approaching in a hot air balloon. I’ve skipped his landing and his introducing himself to the heroine:

Her eyes dropped to the faux pas in his attire, the lack of cravat. She’d never seen a man’s throat and collarbone before. Well, except her father’s and he didn’t count. Her heart gave an extra little thump. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her as to what lay beneath his shirt.

Strong-looking fingers fiddled with the collar at his throat, attempting to close the gap.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

IN OTHER NEWS: MUST LOVE BREECHES finaled in the Celtic Hearts RWA chapter contest, the Golden Claddagh, in the paranormal category this past week!

To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here.

Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! 

, , , ,

38 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 7/8/12

  1. gzidar July 8, 2012 at 6:29 am #

    Who knew a man’s neck could elicit the same response as a woman’s ankles in the elizabethan era :-) … a funny scene. His discomfort was well illustrated.

  2. Lisa Fox July 8, 2012 at 6:31 am #

    He’s practically naked! Scandalous! Lol!

  3. jamieayres July 8, 2012 at 7:05 am #

    SO cute . . . if only we could return to that type of innocence in today’s society!
    P.S. Love the new look of your blog:-)

  4. Gem Sivad July 8, 2012 at 7:13 am #

    Shocking show of flesh. Definitely captures the era. Great six!

  5. Heather Boyd July 8, 2012 at 7:21 am #

    Great scene and description.

  6. Jessica Subject July 8, 2012 at 7:45 am #

    A cute six to draw me into the world. Well done! And I like the new look of your blog! :)

  7. Cara Bristol July 8, 2012 at 8:40 am #

    I really like that you said she’d never seen a man’s collarbone before. That’s something different.

  8. Kate July 8, 2012 at 8:49 am #

    First let me say I love the new look! Second, I love your six! Puts me in mind of a certain tall British actor with a shirt that’s partly open, in a field at dawn.

    • Angela Quarles July 8, 2012 at 8:59 am #

      Rawr! I know which one, of course! Was just thinking the other day how fortuitous it was for me to click on that movie’s forum link and see what was up….

  9. Joyce Scarbrough July 8, 2012 at 8:53 am #

    Well, it serves him right if she jumps his bones right there. Honestly, walking around with his neck and collarbone showing like that! 😉 Great six!

  10. L.j. Kentowski July 8, 2012 at 9:14 am #

    Love the new look, Angela! Also love the little peek-a-boo play with this excerpt. Reels us right in! Great 6!

  11. Gemma Parkes July 8, 2012 at 9:35 am #

    I love your attention to detail!

  12. Owllady/Marcia July 8, 2012 at 9:49 am #

    Cool six, Angela! Very much in keeping with the era. Her excitement feels very natural. And I love how you say just enough to give me a clear visual!

    And I think your new blog look rocks, too.

  13. veronicascott July 8, 2012 at 9:50 am #

    Love the new look for the blog! And I am surely enjoying the unfolding of this story – great six today!

  14. Lila Shaw July 8, 2012 at 9:52 am #

    Congrats on Breeches!! I can see how those tiny black hairs would be absolutely mesmerizing if the dress of the day forbade exposure of such in polite company.

  15. Mae Clair July 8, 2012 at 9:54 am #

    Enticing six that conjured a lovely image. Her reaction is perfect!

    Congrats on finaling in the Golden Claddagh with MUST LOVE BREECHES, and I love the new decor of your blog!!

  16. Elin Gregory July 8, 2012 at 10:39 am #

    Oh terrific. I love how this is progressing.

  17. Sue July 8, 2012 at 11:02 am #

    only one comment–well done!

  18. S. J. Maylee July 8, 2012 at 11:26 am #

    Love the new look and all it’s dimensions and congratulations on the contest.
    Fab 6. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her<– love this, teasing her :)

  19. Sadie Hart July 8, 2012 at 11:27 am #

    LOVE the new look and your six. AND huge congrats on finaling!

  20. Carrie-Anne July 8, 2012 at 11:29 am #

    I love your new page design! It’s refreshing to see how an exposed throat and collarbone were considered sensual and thrilling once upon a time.

  21. sueannbowlingauthor July 8, 2012 at 12:39 pm #

    Congrats on the contest. And yes, what is scandalous exposure is very much dictated by social norms. It’s leading to a lot of conflict today (e.g., headscarves.)

  22. K.E. Saxon July 8, 2012 at 1:04 pm #

    Congrats on finaling in the contest, Angela, and here’s to a win!! I love that story. As for this one: Totally groovin’ on the heroine’s sexual awareness/awakening and the hero’s upright reaction to her perusal. Great six!!

  23. Kate Meader (@KittyMeader) July 8, 2012 at 1:54 pm #

    Seduction by a man’s throat? Awesome, Angela. Loving the sound of this story so far.

  24. A.S. Fenichel July 8, 2012 at 3:42 pm #

    I absolutely love this! I just put you on my TBR list. Thanks for sharing.

  25. Kylie Scott July 8, 2012 at 5:36 pm #

    Swoon. How racy. Fab stuff, Angela. Your new look is gorgeous as well. :)

  26. Jess Schira July 8, 2012 at 6:21 pm #

    I really like the line about her having never seen a male throat/collarbone before. It’s an excellent way of reminding the reader about the timeline. Great six.

  27. lvoisin July 8, 2012 at 8:56 pm #

    Great six! Very fun!

  28. laurakayeauthor July 8, 2012 at 9:53 pm #

    I really enjoyed this! Great showing! And congrats on the contest final!

  29. ellaquinnauthor July 9, 2012 at 10:54 am #

    Shocking. I love a man’s neck.

  30. siobhanmuir July 9, 2012 at 11:55 am #

    I liked the last line. I really brought his discomfort into focus. Good six, Angela. :)

  31. J.M. Blackman July 9, 2012 at 1:43 pm #

    Love the details here. You’ve convinced me his neck showing IS scandalous, so, you’re fantastic. I love it. Congratulations on the contest final. You rock.

  32. susan craig July 9, 2012 at 8:26 pm #

    The new novel sounds like fun! And congratulations on making the finals with Must Love Breeches!!

  33. Donna Cummings July 10, 2012 at 9:27 am #

    The new blog design is wonderful! And congrats on another contest final — you’re on a roll here! I love this snippet, especially their heightened awareness of each other. :)

Trackbacks/Pingbacks

  1. Six Sentence Sunday – 8/5/12 « Angela Quarles - August 5, 2012

    […] Six Sunday I’m picking up roughly where we left off a month ago (!) with my steampunk romance STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. Rawley has landed in a balloon, and his cravat has […]

  2. Six Sentence Sunday – 10/14/12 « Angela Quarles - October 14, 2012

    […] an agitated horse and our heroine arrives, breathless (It’s been a while, but here’s a link to an earlier SSS entry where Rawley gave the heroine a scandalous peek at his neck when they first met the previous day, […]

Leave a Reply

Powered by WordPress. Designed by WooThemes

%d bloggers like this: