Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.
This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. Last week we saw the hero’s cravat sail away in the breeze as he’s approaching in a hot air balloon. I’ve skipped his landing and his introducing himself to the heroine:
Her eyes dropped to the faux pas in his attire, the lack of cravat. She’d never seen a man’s throat and collarbone before. Well, except her father’s and he didn’t count. Her heart gave an extra little thump. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her as to what lay beneath his shirt.
Strong-looking fingers fiddled with the collar at his throat, attempting to close the gap.
As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!
IN OTHER NEWS: MUST LOVE BREECHES finaled in the Celtic Hearts RWA chapter contest, the Golden Claddagh, in the paranormal category this past week!
To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here.
Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week!
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gzidar
/ July 8, 2012Who knew a man’s neck could elicit the same response as a woman’s ankles in the elizabethan era
… a funny scene. His discomfort was well illustrated.
Lisa Fox
/ July 8, 2012He’s practically naked! Scandalous! Lol!
jamieayres
/ July 8, 2012SO cute . . . if only we could return to that type of innocence in today’s society!
P.S. Love the new look of your blog:-)
Gem Sivad
/ July 8, 2012Shocking show of flesh. Definitely captures the era. Great six!
Heather Boyd
/ July 8, 2012Great scene and description.
Jessica Subject
/ July 8, 2012A cute six to draw me into the world. Well done! And I like the new look of your blog!
Cara Bristol
/ July 8, 2012I really like that you said she’d never seen a man’s collarbone before. That’s something different.
Kate
/ July 8, 2012First let me say I love the new look! Second, I love your six! Puts me in mind of a certain tall British actor with a shirt that’s partly open, in a field at dawn.
Angela Quarles
/ July 8, 2012Rawr! I know which one, of course! Was just thinking the other day how fortuitous it was for me to click on that movie’s forum link and see what was up….
Stephanie
/ July 8, 2012*swoons* Great comparison!
Joyce Scarbrough
/ July 8, 2012Well, it serves him right if she jumps his bones right there. Honestly, walking around with his neck and collarbone showing like that!
Great six!
L.j. Kentowski
/ July 8, 2012Love the new look, Angela! Also love the little peek-a-boo play with this excerpt. Reels us right in! Great 6!
Gemma Parkes
/ July 8, 2012I love your attention to detail!
Owllady/Marcia
/ July 8, 2012Cool six, Angela! Very much in keeping with the era. Her excitement feels very natural. And I love how you say just enough to give me a clear visual!
And I think your new blog look rocks, too.
veronicascott
/ July 8, 2012Love the new look for the blog! And I am surely enjoying the unfolding of this story – great six today!
Lila Shaw
/ July 8, 2012Congrats on Breeches!! I can see how those tiny black hairs would be absolutely mesmerizing if the dress of the day forbade exposure of such in polite company.
Mae Clair
/ July 8, 2012Enticing six that conjured a lovely image. Her reaction is perfect!
Congrats on finaling in the Golden Claddagh with MUST LOVE BREECHES, and I love the new decor of your blog!!
Elin Gregory
/ July 8, 2012Oh terrific. I love how this is progressing.
Sue
/ July 8, 2012only one comment–well done!
S. J. Maylee
/ July 8, 2012Love the new look and all it’s dimensions and congratulations on the contest.
Fab 6. Tiny black hairs were sprinkled there, teasing her<– love this, teasing her
Sadie Hart
/ July 8, 2012LOVE the new look and your six. AND huge congrats on finaling!
Carrie-Anne
/ July 8, 2012I love your new page design! It’s refreshing to see how an exposed throat and collarbone were considered sensual and thrilling once upon a time.
sueannbowlingauthor
/ July 8, 2012Congrats on the contest. And yes, what is scandalous exposure is very much dictated by social norms. It’s leading to a lot of conflict today (e.g., headscarves.)
K.E. Saxon
/ July 8, 2012Congrats on finaling in the contest, Angela, and here’s to a win!! I love that story. As for this one: Totally groovin’ on the heroine’s sexual awareness/awakening and the hero’s upright reaction to her perusal. Great six!!
Kate Meader (@KittyMeader)
/ July 8, 2012Seduction by a man’s throat? Awesome, Angela. Loving the sound of this story so far.
A.S. Fenichel
/ July 8, 2012I absolutely love this! I just put you on my TBR list. Thanks for sharing.
Kylie Scott
/ July 8, 2012Swoon. How racy. Fab stuff, Angela. Your new look is gorgeous as well.
Jess Schira
/ July 8, 2012I really like the line about her having never seen a male throat/collarbone before. It’s an excellent way of reminding the reader about the timeline. Great six.
lvoisin
/ July 8, 2012Great six! Very fun!
laurakayeauthor
/ July 8, 2012I really enjoyed this! Great showing! And congrats on the contest final!
ellaquinnauthor
/ July 9, 2012Shocking. I love a man’s neck.
siobhanmuir
/ July 9, 2012I liked the last line. I really brought his discomfort into focus. Good six, Angela.
J.M. Blackman
/ July 9, 2012Love the details here. You’ve convinced me his neck showing IS scandalous, so, you’re fantastic. I love it. Congratulations on the contest final. You rock.
J.M. Blackman
/ July 9, 2012And your new layout is bad-ass. I’m a fan.
susan craig
/ July 9, 2012The new novel sounds like fun! And congratulations on making the finals with Must Love Breeches!!
Donna Cummings
/ July 10, 2012The new blog design is wonderful! And congrats on another contest final — you’re on a roll here! I love this snippet, especially their heightened awareness of each other.