Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land! (You can see the other entries here.)
I am currently looking for Beta readers. If you’re interested, let me know. I’ve stopped querying to see how this batch takes and so this new round of Beta reading will be to help me tighten up what problems will have come to light.
Here’s my pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies.
This is the midpoint of the novel, right after she’s caught him sneaking around in a room at a ball. Oh, and she’s on top of him on the floor because she’d been surprised by him and tackled him to the floor before she realized who it was. Picking up a couple lines later from last week–someone’s opening the door, he kisses her for cover, and she responds, much to his astonishment and he kisses her back (which we’re skipping so we can get to the dialogue), and now (this is in his POV):
At the sound of the door closing firmly, Miss Rochon flinched slightly, breaking contact. “What was that?” she breathed.
“Nothing to worry about.” His voice was pitched lower and rougher.
“Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”
As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!
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Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week!
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Heather Boyd
/ May 6, 2012Love a character who is not afraid to go after what she wants, especially kisses. Great six!
Stephanie
/ May 6, 2012I totally love this chick! She’s totally going to flip his world upside down!
Lisa Fox
/ May 6, 2012Lol! I don’t he has any idea what he is for. What fun!
Donna Cummings
/ May 6, 2012LOL — this is such great fun. It sounds like this modern woman is just what he needs.
Jalisa Blackman (@J_M_Blackman)
/ May 6, 2012These characters are so lovable, and it’s interactions like this that really show why. Their chemistry is just so fun.
Gem
/ May 6, 2012A thoroughly modern miss and he’s flummoxed. Love it!
Joanne Stewart
/ May 6, 2012Ha! I LOVE her response. I can’t wait to see his! Fantastic six!
K.E. Saxon
/ May 6, 2012Let’s hope he likes a woman with modern sensibilities–cuz that’s just what he’s got! Great six. I’m really enjoying seeing the story unfold.
Kate Meader (@KittyMeader)
/ May 6, 2012“Where were we” indeed! Another great six.
Dee Carney (@dee_carney)
/ May 6, 2012Oh yay! Where were they, indeed?!
Owllady/Marcia
/ May 6, 2012We a short discussion on CC recently (which you may remember) about using “breathed” and I think you have an instance where it fits the tone of the scene. It’ll be fun to see how he continues to react to her!
Angela Quarles
/ May 6, 2012No, I missed that discussion. But glad to know this works
Will dig that post up…
Ursula Grey
/ May 6, 2012LOVED this six, Angela! The characters sparkle with life ~ nicely done. For a variety of reasons, I can’t wait to read this.
Lee Ann Ward
/ May 6, 2012Angela, thanks for the warm welcome to SSS, and your wonderful comments. I really appreciate it
And, your six sentences are great! Gotta love a spunky gal who’s not afraid to go after what she wants. Give that girl another kiss! 
veronicascott
/ May 6, 2012I LOVE this novel and I enjoy his surprise at her “boldness”. More surprises to come, I’m sure. Great six!
Lorraine Paton
/ May 6, 2012LOL. Oh, those shocking modern girls! Love your six!
Carrie-Anne
/ May 6, 2012I love her response! I wish I’d been that bold in my own relationship.
Mae Clair
/ May 6, 2012So much fun. The girl definitely knows a good thing when she’s found it (or in this case him, LOL)! Great six!
Sue
/ May 6, 2012yeah I happened across this section …good scene and I see why there would be discussion about “Breahed” It didn’t bother me when I read it. I can’t wait for the conversation later. She is so very different from the girls in that time period.
Sadie Hart
/ May 6, 2012““Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”” LOL Great six Angela! He definitely didn’t see that coming!
S. J. Maylee
/ May 6, 2012After last weeks 6 and the start of this weeks I could feel that flinch, nice. Even better, she didn’t let it knock her from the moment. I was cheering for her here!
fun 6, thank you
Corinne Davies
/ May 6, 2012Go Girl Go! I love reading about strong women in historicals. Great six
Kate
/ May 6, 2012Go Isabel! Get that hunky Vicious Viscount! Fantastic six, Angela!
Lila Shaw
/ May 6, 2012Forward chit, isn’t she? LOL At least that’s probably his first thought before he kicks it aside and goes with the flow.
Jo-Ann Carson
/ May 6, 2012I love how she comes back. You can feel the moment. Great six
sarahballance
/ May 6, 2012OMG, I love her! And what he must be THINKING! This is such fun. *grins*
Candice Bundy
/ May 6, 2012He’s got to be wondering what she’s all about! Fab six!
Silver James
/ May 6, 2012I do love a thoroughly modern woman unafraid to go after what she wants. Me thinks the hero is in for a bit of shock!
Great six, Angela.
Zee Monodee
/ May 6, 2012LOL! This is just awesome! Love how she surprises him this way
Monica Enderle Pierce
/ May 6, 2012Love it! She’s such a pistol and me’thinks he’s outgunned!
L.J. Kentowski
/ May 6, 2012Awesome! I love a woman that takes charge! Hot 6!
Teresa Cypher
/ May 6, 2012This is such a fun read, Angela! And I see that sentiment echoed throughout the comments. From the posts I have read over the past weeks, this is downright delicious fun! She is spunky.
Ryan Derham
/ May 6, 2012Love her last line. She’s probably more than he can handle. Lol
Cate Masters
/ May 6, 2012Bet she has more surprises in store for him. Lovin’ this story.
Paula Martin
/ May 6, 2012Great six, I’m dying to know his reaction and response!
Angela Quarles
/ May 6, 2012next week!
Jennifer Lowery
/ May 6, 2012Ah, love her response! Great six!
sueannbowlingauthor
/ May 6, 2012Talk about culture clash!
movingforeword
/ May 6, 2012Where were “we” indeed? Love it!
Sarah W
/ May 6, 2012I love his constant surprise at her modern views — the confusion goes both ways!
Ginger Simpson
/ May 6, 2012Sometimes, all we need to know is that there aren’t going to be any interruptions. Great scene, Angela.
Melynda Price
/ May 6, 2012Here’s a girl who isn’t afraid to go after what she wants. A great six!
gzidar
/ May 6, 2012There’s something of a theme to the sixes I’m reading this week. All of them feature strong women who go after what they want. Did I miss the memo?
Another excellent six. Thank you.
Angela Quarles
/ May 6, 2012I noticed that too! Really strange!
Kylie Scott
/ May 6, 2012Strong women are the way of the future! Cool 6, Angela!
Babette James
/ May 6, 2012lol Very nice! Loved her taking another kiss.
Karen Michelle Nutt
/ May 6, 2012lol- Love the last sentence. I can’t wait to find out how he responds.
elaine cantrell
/ May 6, 2012I like that last line. What’s he going to think?
Jessica Subject
/ May 6, 2012Oh, way to go, girl! Must have caught him by surprise. LOL Great six!
writrchick1985
/ May 6, 2012Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too.
Tonya Burrows
/ May 6, 2012Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too!
Chantel Rhondeau
/ May 6, 2012I love how Isabelle forgets herself here and just goes right on kissing him! Nice job!
Elin Gregory
/ May 7, 2012Ah, great. It’ll be nice to see his reactions to her wildly inappropriate, by his standards, behaviour.
Keep ‘em coming.
Joyce Scarbrough
/ May 7, 2012A hussy after my own heart!
Looking forward to reading more next Sunday!
Jess Schira
/ May 7, 2012What a fun lighthearted 6
If you’re still looking for beta readers, let me know. I can always find time for reading.