Six Sentence Sunday – 5/6/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land! (You can see the other entries here.)

I am currently looking for Beta readers. If you’re interested, let me know. I’ve stopped querying to see how this batch takes and so this new round of Beta reading will be to help me tighten up what problems will have come to light.

Here’s my pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies. 

This is the midpoint of the novel, right after she’s caught him sneaking around in a room at a ball. Oh, and she’s on top of him on the floor because she’d been surprised by him and tackled him to the floor before she realized who it was. Picking up a couple lines later from last week–someone’s opening the door, he kisses her for cover, and she responds, much to his astonishment and he kisses her back (which we’re skipping so we can get to the dialogue), and now (this is in his POV):

At the sound of the door closing firmly, Miss Rochon flinched slightly, breaking contact. “What was that?” she breathed.

“Nothing to worry about.” His voice was pitched lower and rougher.

“Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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55 Comments

  1. Love a character who is not afraid to go after what she wants, especially kisses. Great six!

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  2. I totally love this chick! She’s totally going to flip his world upside down!

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  3. Lol! I don’t he has any idea what he is for. What fun!

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  4. LOL — this is such great fun. It sounds like this modern woman is just what he needs. :)

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  5. These characters are so lovable, and it’s interactions like this that really show why. Their chemistry is just so fun.

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  6. Gem

     /  May 6, 2012

    A thoroughly modern miss and he’s flummoxed. Love it!

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  7. Ha! I LOVE her response. I can’t wait to see his! Fantastic six!

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  8. Let’s hope he likes a woman with modern sensibilities–cuz that’s just what he’s got! Great six. I’m really enjoying seeing the story unfold.

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  9. “Where were we” indeed! Another great six.

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  10. Oh yay! Where were they, indeed?!

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  11. We a short discussion on CC recently (which you may remember) about using “breathed” and I think you have an instance where it fits the tone of the scene. It’ll be fun to see how he continues to react to her!

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  12. LOVED this six, Angela! The characters sparkle with life ~ nicely done. For a variety of reasons, I can’t wait to read this.

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  13. Angela, thanks for the warm welcome to SSS, and your wonderful comments. I really appreciate it :) And, your six sentences are great! Gotta love a spunky gal who’s not afraid to go after what she wants. Give that girl another kiss! ;)

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  14. I LOVE this novel and I enjoy his surprise at her “boldness”. More surprises to come, I’m sure. Great six!

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  15. LOL. Oh, those shocking modern girls! Love your six! :)

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  16. I love her response! I wish I’d been that bold in my own relationship.

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  17. So much fun. The girl definitely knows a good thing when she’s found it (or in this case him, LOL)! Great six!

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  18. yeah I happened across this section …good scene and I see why there would be discussion about “Breahed” It didn’t bother me when I read it. I can’t wait for the conversation later. She is so very different from the girls in that time period.

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  19. ““Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”” LOL Great six Angela! He definitely didn’t see that coming!

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  20. After last weeks 6 and the start of this weeks I could feel that flinch, nice. Even better, she didn’t let it knock her from the moment. I was cheering for her here! :) fun 6, thank you

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  21. Go Girl Go! I love reading about strong women in historicals. Great six :)

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  22. Go Isabel! Get that hunky Vicious Viscount! Fantastic six, Angela!

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  23. Forward chit, isn’t she? LOL At least that’s probably his first thought before he kicks it aside and goes with the flow. ;)

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  24. Jo-Ann Carson

     /  May 6, 2012

    I love how she comes back. You can feel the moment. Great six

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  25. OMG, I love her! And what he must be THINKING! This is such fun. *grins*

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  26. He’s got to be wondering what she’s all about! Fab six! :)

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  27. I do love a thoroughly modern woman unafraid to go after what she wants. Me thinks the hero is in for a bit of shock! ;) Great six, Angela.

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  28. LOL! This is just awesome! Love how she surprises him this way :)

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  29. Monica Enderle Pierce

     /  May 6, 2012

    Love it! She’s such a pistol and me’thinks he’s outgunned! ;)

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  30. Awesome! I love a woman that takes charge! Hot 6!

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  31. This is such a fun read, Angela! And I see that sentiment echoed throughout the comments. From the posts I have read over the past weeks, this is downright delicious fun! She is spunky. :-)

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  32. Love her last line. She’s probably more than he can handle. Lol

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  33. Bet she has more surprises in store for him. Lovin’ this story.

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  34. Great six, I’m dying to know his reaction and response!

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  35. Jennifer Lowery

     /  May 6, 2012

    Ah, love her response! Great six!

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  36. Talk about culture clash!

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  37. Where were “we” indeed? Love it!

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  38. I love his constant surprise at her modern views — the confusion goes both ways!

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  39. Sometimes, all we need to know is that there aren’t going to be any interruptions. Great scene, Angela.

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  40. Here’s a girl who isn’t afraid to go after what she wants. A great six!

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  41. There’s something of a theme to the sixes I’m reading this week. All of them feature strong women who go after what they want. Did I miss the memo? :-) Another excellent six. Thank you.

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  42. Strong women are the way of the future! Cool 6, Angela!

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  43. lol Very nice! Loved her taking another kiss.

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  44. lol- Love the last sentence. I can’t wait to find out how he responds.

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  45. I like that last line. What’s he going to think?

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  46. Jessica Subject

     /  May 6, 2012

    Oh, way to go, girl! Must have caught him by surprise. LOL Great six! :)

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  47. writrchick1985

     /  May 6, 2012

    Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too.

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  48. Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too!

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  49. I love how Isabelle forgets herself here and just goes right on kissing him! Nice job!

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  50. Ah, great. It’ll be nice to see his reactions to her wildly inappropriate, by his standards, behaviour. :) Keep ‘em coming.

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  51. A hussy after my own heart! ;-) Looking forward to reading more next Sunday!

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  52. What a fun lighthearted 6 :) If you’re still looking for beta readers, let me know. I can always find time for reading.

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