Six Sentence Sunday – 5/6/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land! (You can see the other entries here.)

I am currently looking for Beta readers. If you’re interested, let me know. I’ve stopped querying to see how this batch takes and so this new round of Beta reading will be to help me tighten up what problems will have come to light.

Here’s my pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies. 

This is the midpoint of the novel, right after she’s caught him sneaking around in a room at a ball. Oh, and she’s on top of him on the floor because she’d been surprised by him and tackled him to the floor before she realized who it was. Picking up a couple lines later from last week–someone’s opening the door, he kisses her for cover, and she responds, much to his astonishment and he kisses her back (which we’re skipping so we can get to the dialogue), and now (this is in his POV):

At the sound of the door closing firmly, Miss Rochon flinched slightly, breaking contact. “What was that?” she breathed.

“Nothing to worry about.” His voice was pitched lower and rougher.

“Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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55 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 5/6/12

  1. Heather Boyd May 6, 2012 at 7:09 am #

    Love a character who is not afraid to go after what she wants, especially kisses. Great six!

  2. Stephanie May 6, 2012 at 7:16 am #

    I totally love this chick! She’s totally going to flip his world upside down!

  3. Lisa Fox May 6, 2012 at 7:36 am #

    Lol! I don’t he has any idea what he is for. What fun!

  4. Donna Cummings May 6, 2012 at 8:18 am #

    LOL — this is such great fun. It sounds like this modern woman is just what he needs. :)

  5. Jalisa Blackman (@J_M_Blackman) May 6, 2012 at 8:48 am #

    These characters are so lovable, and it’s interactions like this that really show why. Their chemistry is just so fun.

  6. Gem May 6, 2012 at 8:57 am #

    A thoroughly modern miss and he’s flummoxed. Love it!

  7. Joanne Stewart May 6, 2012 at 9:36 am #

    Ha! I LOVE her response. I can’t wait to see his! Fantastic six!

  8. K.E. Saxon May 6, 2012 at 9:47 am #

    Let’s hope he likes a woman with modern sensibilities–cuz that’s just what he’s got! Great six. I’m really enjoying seeing the story unfold.

  9. Kate Meader (@KittyMeader) May 6, 2012 at 10:12 am #

    “Where were we” indeed! Another great six.

  10. Dee Carney (@dee_carney) May 6, 2012 at 10:22 am #

    Oh yay! Where were they, indeed?!

  11. Owllady/Marcia May 6, 2012 at 10:22 am #

    We a short discussion on CC recently (which you may remember) about using “breathed” and I think you have an instance where it fits the tone of the scene. It’ll be fun to see how he continues to react to her!

    • Angela Quarles May 6, 2012 at 10:28 am #

      No, I missed that discussion. But glad to know this works :) Will dig that post up…

  12. Ursula Grey May 6, 2012 at 10:28 am #

    LOVED this six, Angela! The characters sparkle with life ~ nicely done. For a variety of reasons, I can’t wait to read this.

  13. Lee Ann Ward May 6, 2012 at 10:30 am #

    Angela, thanks for the warm welcome to SSS, and your wonderful comments. I really appreciate it :) And, your six sentences are great! Gotta love a spunky gal who’s not afraid to go after what she wants. Give that girl another kiss! 😉

  14. veronicascott May 6, 2012 at 10:43 am #

    I LOVE this novel and I enjoy his surprise at her “boldness”. More surprises to come, I’m sure. Great six!

  15. Lorraine Paton May 6, 2012 at 10:45 am #

    LOL. Oh, those shocking modern girls! Love your six! :)

  16. Carrie-Anne May 6, 2012 at 10:55 am #

    I love her response! I wish I’d been that bold in my own relationship.

  17. Mae Clair May 6, 2012 at 11:00 am #

    So much fun. The girl definitely knows a good thing when she’s found it (or in this case him, LOL)! Great six!

  18. Sue May 6, 2012 at 11:02 am #

    yeah I happened across this section …good scene and I see why there would be discussion about “Breahed” It didn’t bother me when I read it. I can’t wait for the conversation later. She is so very different from the girls in that time period.

  19. Sadie Hart May 6, 2012 at 11:02 am #

    ““Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”” LOL Great six Angela! He definitely didn’t see that coming!

  20. S. J. Maylee May 6, 2012 at 11:28 am #

    After last weeks 6 and the start of this weeks I could feel that flinch, nice. Even better, she didn’t let it knock her from the moment. I was cheering for her here! :) fun 6, thank you

  21. Corinne Davies May 6, 2012 at 11:30 am #

    Go Girl Go! I love reading about strong women in historicals. Great six :)

  22. Kate May 6, 2012 at 11:32 am #

    Go Isabel! Get that hunky Vicious Viscount! Fantastic six, Angela!

  23. Lila Shaw May 6, 2012 at 11:39 am #

    Forward chit, isn’t she? LOL At least that’s probably his first thought before he kicks it aside and goes with the flow. 😉

  24. Jo-Ann Carson May 6, 2012 at 11:42 am #

    I love how she comes back. You can feel the moment. Great six

  25. sarahballance May 6, 2012 at 11:48 am #

    OMG, I love her! And what he must be THINKING! This is such fun. *grins*

  26. Candice Bundy May 6, 2012 at 12:10 pm #

    He’s got to be wondering what she’s all about! Fab six! :)

  27. Silver James May 6, 2012 at 12:25 pm #

    I do love a thoroughly modern woman unafraid to go after what she wants. Me thinks the hero is in for a bit of shock! 😉 Great six, Angela.

  28. Zee Monodee May 6, 2012 at 12:54 pm #

    LOL! This is just awesome! Love how she surprises him this way :)

  29. Monica Enderle Pierce May 6, 2012 at 1:02 pm #

    Love it! She’s such a pistol and me’thinks he’s outgunned! 😉

  30. L.J. Kentowski May 6, 2012 at 1:36 pm #

    Awesome! I love a woman that takes charge! Hot 6!

  31. Teresa Cypher May 6, 2012 at 1:44 pm #

    This is such a fun read, Angela! And I see that sentiment echoed throughout the comments. From the posts I have read over the past weeks, this is downright delicious fun! She is spunky. :-)

  32. Ryan Derham May 6, 2012 at 1:47 pm #

    Love her last line. She’s probably more than he can handle. Lol

  33. Cate Masters May 6, 2012 at 1:48 pm #

    Bet she has more surprises in store for him. Lovin’ this story.

  34. Paula Martin May 6, 2012 at 2:07 pm #

    Great six, I’m dying to know his reaction and response!

  35. Jennifer Lowery May 6, 2012 at 2:48 pm #

    Ah, love her response! Great six!

  36. sueannbowlingauthor May 6, 2012 at 3:06 pm #

    Talk about culture clash!

  37. movingforeword May 6, 2012 at 3:34 pm #

    Where were “we” indeed? Love it!

  38. Sarah W May 6, 2012 at 3:46 pm #

    I love his constant surprise at her modern views — the confusion goes both ways!

  39. Ginger Simpson May 6, 2012 at 4:54 pm #

    Sometimes, all we need to know is that there aren’t going to be any interruptions. Great scene, Angela.

  40. Melynda Price May 6, 2012 at 5:25 pm #

    Here’s a girl who isn’t afraid to go after what she wants. A great six!

  41. gzidar May 6, 2012 at 6:02 pm #

    There’s something of a theme to the sixes I’m reading this week. All of them feature strong women who go after what they want. Did I miss the memo? :-) Another excellent six. Thank you.

  42. Kylie Scott May 6, 2012 at 6:19 pm #

    Strong women are the way of the future! Cool 6, Angela!

  43. Babette James May 6, 2012 at 6:37 pm #

    lol Very nice! Loved her taking another kiss.

  44. Karen Michelle Nutt May 6, 2012 at 6:46 pm #

    lol- Love the last sentence. I can’t wait to find out how he responds.

  45. elaine cantrell May 6, 2012 at 7:03 pm #

    I like that last line. What’s he going to think?

  46. Jessica Subject May 6, 2012 at 7:16 pm #

    Oh, way to go, girl! Must have caught him by surprise. LOL Great six! :)

  47. writrchick1985 May 6, 2012 at 9:27 pm #

    Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too.

  48. Tonya Burrows May 6, 2012 at 9:28 pm #

    Go girl! I’d keep kissing him too!

  49. Chantel Rhondeau May 6, 2012 at 9:51 pm #

    I love how Isabelle forgets herself here and just goes right on kissing him! Nice job!

  50. Elin Gregory May 7, 2012 at 8:18 am #

    Ah, great. It’ll be nice to see his reactions to her wildly inappropriate, by his standards, behaviour. :) Keep ’em coming.

  51. Joyce Scarbrough May 7, 2012 at 12:30 pm #

    A hussy after my own heart! 😉 Looking forward to reading more next Sunday!

  52. Jess Schira May 7, 2012 at 1:25 pm #

    What a fun lighthearted 6 :) If you’re still looking for beta readers, let me know. I can always find time for reading.

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