Six Sentence Sunday – 5/6/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land! (You can see the other entries here.)

I am currently looking for Beta readers. If you’re interested, let me know. I’ve stopped querying to see how this batch takes and so this new round of Beta reading will be to help me tighten up what problems will have come to light.

Here’s my pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies. 

This is the midpoint of the novel, right after she’s caught him sneaking around in a room at a ball. Oh, and she’s on top of him on the floor because she’d been surprised by him and tackled him to the floor before she realized who it was. Picking up a couple lines later from last week–someone’s opening the door, he kisses her for cover, and she responds, much to his astonishment and he kisses her back (which we’re skipping so we can get to the dialogue), and now (this is in his POV):

At the sound of the door closing firmly, Miss Rochon flinched slightly, breaking contact. “What was that?” she breathed.

“Nothing to worry about.” His voice was pitched lower and rougher.

“Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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55 Replies to “Six Sentence Sunday – 5/6/12”

  1. Let’s hope he likes a woman with modern sensibilities–cuz that’s just what he’s got! Great six. I’m really enjoying seeing the story unfold.

  2. We a short discussion on CC recently (which you may remember) about using “breathed” and I think you have an instance where it fits the tone of the scene. It’ll be fun to see how he continues to react to her!

  3. Angela, thanks for the warm welcome to SSS, and your wonderful comments. I really appreciate it 🙂 And, your six sentences are great! Gotta love a spunky gal who’s not afraid to go after what she wants. Give that girl another kiss! 😉

  4. yeah I happened across this section …good scene and I see why there would be discussion about “Breahed” It didn’t bother me when I read it. I can’t wait for the conversation later. She is so very different from the girls in that time period.

  5. ““Oh, good.” And to his complete shock, she brought her lips back to his and whispered, “Now, where were we?”” LOL Great six Angela! He definitely didn’t see that coming!

  6. After last weeks 6 and the start of this weeks I could feel that flinch, nice. Even better, she didn’t let it knock her from the moment. I was cheering for her here! 🙂 fun 6, thank you

  7. This is such a fun read, Angela! And I see that sentiment echoed throughout the comments. From the posts I have read over the past weeks, this is downright delicious fun! She is spunky. 🙂

  8. There’s something of a theme to the sixes I’m reading this week. All of them feature strong women who go after what they want. Did I miss the memo? 🙂 Another excellent six. Thank you.

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