Weekend Writing Warriors – 9/22/13

www_bannerEgad, I haven’t done one of these in seven months! I’ve missed it! For those new to this, fellow writers post eight sentences from one of our works. I’ve been revising my New Adult steampunk romance, STEAM ME UP RAWLEY, so I thought I’d just start with the first eight sentences.

Early May, 1890, Mobile, Alabama Second Age of Pax Lincolnia “Put that down, Loki.” Adele darted a glance around the outdoor party at Chastang House and replaced the doily on the lawn table, only a tad wrinkled from her monkey’s fist. She smoothed it out. If she could just get through this affair without her normally well-behaved monkey pulling a stunt, she’d appreciate it, thank you very much. “You need to—” “Talking to your monkey, Adele?” asked a feminine voice behind her. “How quaint.”

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23 Replies to “Weekend Writing Warriors – 9/22/13”

  1. That Loki is a pistol! It’s good to see you again, Angela! 🙂

    The feminine voice behind her? Sounds like you’re introducing someone the reader will love to hate 🙂

    Good 8! 🙂

  2. yea! You’re back. I stopped posting here a while back due to revisions (ok ok due to rewrite and rethink whole concept) Glad to see you and wondering who the woman is

  3. Agree with the comments above – Loki sounds as if he will be fun and the “feminine voice” sounds like some as said above ‘the reader will love to hate’. Thanks for posting

      1. Have you ever seen a western showdown in one of those old movies, like “High Noon”? There’s a sort of special warbling note that signals that the shootout is imminent and unavoidable . . .

        Really, I just meant, “Uh, oh! Duck!” 🙂

  4. A sure way of pulling this reader in. I first thought the monkey referred to herself, but no, the monkey is for real. Very interesting. The woman talking behind her is a mystery at this point. Good cliff hanger.

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