Six Sentence Sunday – 3/4/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP tentatively titled MUST LOVE BREECHES. I will be returning from the FF&P Fantasy on the Bayou Conference on Sunday, so will be a little later in the day visiting everyone. UPDATE: Just found out I finaled in the WRWDC Chapter’s Marlene Contest in the paranormal category!

Here’s my new pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies.  (You can see the other entries here.)

This is from Isabelle’s POV, and she and Lord Montagu are in a curricle (a type of carriage) heading to Hyde Park. She’s only been back in time for two days and he’s just called on her to ask her to go on this ride with him:

Twenty minutes later, Isabelle clutched the edge of her seat as Lord Montagu’s curricle rattled alongside all the other stylish carriages that crammed Rotten Row in Hyde Park. Elegantly dressed women mingled along the lane strolling, or talking in small groups; men and women trotted on horses; and, to Isabelle’s astonishment, tradespeople and servants lined the edges here and there, staring and pointing. It was as if the promenaders formed a parade for the less fortunate to gawk at. And the way the promenaders behaved—strutting, gossiping with others they met on their amble—it reminded Isabelle of the practice of cruising with cars that used to be popular. She stifled a giggle when they passed a group of garishly dressed men in their early twenties—real live fops! They looked pleased with themselves.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here. Other participants writing time travel: Gayle Ramage, Sandra Jones and Maria-Claire Payne

Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! Have a great Sunday!

43 Replies to “Six Sentence Sunday – 3/4/12”

  1. “Real live fops!” I love this story so, so much. It really brings the period to life!

    And . . . am I wrong, or does the Regency era remind anyone else of the nineteeneighties?

  2. That is so cool – parading for the amusement of the lower classes – well they don’t get much of that do they? Yeah it is sort of like when guys would cruise down mainstreet in all their hoped for glory – excellent snippet!

  3. Great scene setting! I like “real live fops!” — I can feel her amusement. I did wonder how the curricle feels. Is it fast, rough? Scary? Or sedate? Her point of comparison would be, what, a carriage ride in Central Park? 😉

  4. Loving the snippet! Marvellous descriptions, too!

    (There’s a bit in our village/town called ‘The Row’ but apparently used to be called ‘Rotten Row’ – no wonder they changed the name, lol!)

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