Six Sentence Sunday – 10/14/12

I’m back after almost a month! I missed y’all!

NEWS: I landed an agent! I actually had three offers! I want to thank all of you who have regularly commented since I started doing #sixsunday almost a year ago. Your support kept me thinking positive even when I faced rejections! Some of you even helped Beta! THANK YOU! This doesn’t necessarily mean a publisher will buy it, but I’m one step closer….

Today’s Six Sunday is from STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY, my steampunk romance set in Mobile, AL. I’m skipping to the next day and we’re finally in Rawley’s POV. He’s outside standing in the rain after calming an agitated horse and our heroine arrives, breathless (It’s been a while, but here’s a link to an earlier SSS entry where Rawley gave the heroine a scandalous peek at his neck when they first met the previous day, so as to put his reflections about his disheveled state in perspective):

Her hat, a frivolous contraption, sat at a jaunty angle on her head. His fingers itched to push it up to sit properly. Over all, she held a large yellow umbrella, protecting her from the blasted rain. He shoved fingers through his wet hair, inwardly cursing to find himself again in a disheveled state before her. The same unsettling feeling as yesterday overtook him, as if his body couldn’t determine if it was about to step off a cliff or fall into a luxuriant, buoyant cloud.

She stepped close, admitting him to her protected space.

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  1. Julie W. Trigg

     /  October 14, 2012

    Love it!!!

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  2. Congrats again — I’m so thrilled for you. :) And I love this snippet. Great description, especially of his unsettled feelings!

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  3. I’m so happy for you! Congrats on catching one of these elusive birds we call agents.

    Loved this six… Great job with the description.

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  4. The last sentence made me laugh. Congrats on landing an agent, it’s awesome news, and you deserve it!

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  5. I so like how he worries what he looks like in front of her. That’s sweet.

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  6. Congrats again on the agent coup, and glad you’re back to Six Sunday! Love how Rawley seems much too concerned with appearances since I have the feeling all that is going to change and he won’t be able to do a thing about it! ;-)

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  7. Oh my gosh! Congrats Angela!!!! I love these two. :)

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  8. Oh, my! When a straightlaced man starts to feel flustered . . . that’s amore! :D

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  9. Love his awkwardness at being disheveled in front of her. Good six. Congrats on the agent.

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  10. Jessica Subject

     /  October 14, 2012

    She doesn’t seem to mind his disheveled state. Nice six!

    And congrats on finding an agent!!! :)

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  11. Congratulations on the agent! I enjoyed the description, nice to have a glimpse into his train of thought – terrific six as always!

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  12. ccwilliamsauthor

     /  October 14, 2012

    Great 6, Angela, loved the diction!

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  13. Carrie Crain

     /  October 14, 2012

    OMG, Angela… mega congrats to you and the agent deal. You must be on cloud ten. I like your snippet, it flows nicely like a soft summer breeze.

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  14. Rich and descriptive. Very nice.

    Now…YAY for you!!!! How wonderful that you got and agent and had a choice. You’re going to go far!

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  15. Congratu-freaking-lations Angela! So exciting for you. I love the last line of this excerpt in particular. Great to see something from his perspective now.

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  16. He’s so cute. Congrats again on you agent.

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  17. Cliff or cloud – nice and I guess it bothers him that she always sees him in an untidy state

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  18. Nicely done on the offers. I knew it wouldn’t be long with as strong as Must Love Breeches is. And nice 6!

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  19. Love the way he perceives his body’s reaction to her. Great six, and CONGRATS on landing an agent!

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  20. There is so much to love here, I couldn’t pick just one! The descriptions are really something. I can see this scene. Well done and congrats again. :D

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  21. siobhanmuir

     /  October 14, 2012

    Nice set up. I like the last line and how it changes the atmosphere. Good six, Angela. :)

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  22. Congratulations on the agent! I haven’t visited your blog before, but your writing is beautiful. These six are wonderful. Great job. Oh, I live about an hour from Mobile.

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  23. Congratulations, Angela! Very exciting news. :-) As always, your six are magnificent.

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  24. Great overall description. And congrats on landing an agent! How did you do it? Curious to know, since I’ll be looking for one next year. Fun six!

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    • Hi Frank, thanks! Click on the highlighted link in my announcement to bring you to the blog post where I talk about how I found my agent…

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  25. I love his perception of her hat “at a jaunty angle”. Congrats on the agent!

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  26. Congratulations again! So deserved after all your hard work! Great 6, your writing voice is fantastic.

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  27. Gem

     /  October 14, 2012

    Congrats on acquiring an agent! Wonderful voice in this six.

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  28. Lanise Brown

     /  October 14, 2012

    I love steampunk. This looks like a great read! :D

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  29. Love your six! Congrats on your news! :)

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  30. Fantastic news! Congrats. Lovely six this week too.

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  31. Congrats on the agent :-)

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  32. Missed you and congratulations on the agent. Love Rawley embarrassed but his disarray.

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  33. Congratulations on snagging an agent! I love your six, particularly the cloud imagery in the fifth line.

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  34. Love the last line and the description in general. Steampunk is fantastic! Congratulations on getting an agent!

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  35. Congratulations!! Agents are scarce as hen’s teeth! Very well done.
    Nice six. too.

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  36. I hope I sent you back and congratulatory email. It was my intention. If not, congratulations! I’m not surprised in the least that BREECHES has ben picked up. It was a wonderful read. Can’t wait to see it in print! As for your six, I love the mood and reserved nature that threads throughout these. Somehow that restraint makes these all the more alluring.

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  37. Congrats! And great six! I love that it is a steampunk story :)

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  38. This drew me right in. Awesome writing!

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