Six Sentence Sunday – 4/8/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP tentatively titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land! (You can see the other entries here.)

I am currently looking for Beta readers. If you’re interested, let me know. I’ve stopped querying to see how this batch takes and so this new round of Beta reading will be to help me tighten up what problems will have come to light.

Here’s my pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies. 

Continuing with the party at Charles Babbage‘s, we’re skipping ahead a page and everyone is staring at the Silver Lady, his dancing automaton:

“I rescued this fair lady from the sale at Weeks Museum only this year,” continued Babbage. “I show this to you not only as a marvel of man’s ingenuity, but as a lesson in the decline of Britain’s industrial spirit. This wonder, ladies and gentlemen, was created by that genius John Merlin at the end of the last century, and what advances in this sphere have we made since? I ask you, what if Mr. Merlin had been supported financially? Would we today have automata in place of butlers, serving us our drinks?” A chorus of chuckles came from the obliging crowd.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! Have a great Easter/Passover!

53 Replies to “Six Sentence Sunday – 4/8/12”

  1. I just love this scene with the Silver Lady! You show very well how Babbage was a pioneer in his creations and his thoughts. Technology certainly has advanced since then! Great six, Angela!

  2. This is so great. 🙂 I love how every “modern” era feels like they have all the answers. LOL Oh, and I get nervous every time I read that your book is “tentatively” titled — I love that title. It can’t be anything else now!

  3. Oh boy, what an interesting supposition about Merlin and butlers. Can’t help but wonder along with your characters. Nice six! Happy Easter Sunday to you. 🙂

    1. I’m taking some liberty with his supposing this, but he did buy this automaton from Merlin, loved it, and did lament about not getting enough funding… apparently the inventor in Dickens’ Little Dorritt was based on Babbage!

  4. I love it when history, reality is combined with fiction great characters and imagination. Yes, no butlers indeed, unimaginable

  5. Nerd love beaming your way from this reader! Six lines that make me want more, because you’ve sucked me into the story. Bonus points for a personal enlightenment moment: I have a serious kink for period detail, especially arcane gadgetry.

    1. LOL! Love me some nerd love! thanks! It was so weird to find out the inventor’s name really was Merlin, LOL.

      It’s funny, I was so afraid to do last week’s and this week’s on Babbage, because it wasn’t focused on the H/h and was afraid folks would find it boring, but am digging the responses…

  6. I am really enjoying this story, wish I was in your heroine’s place, so fun! I hope the book finds just the right publisher *SOON* – best wishes. Enjoyed the excerpt (can you tell? LOL!)

  7. You must have really enjoyed your research for this! It definitely shows. Love the blending of historic realism with the fiction. Well played, lady! (Not to mention that you’ve got me interested in Babbage, too. LOL)

    Also, I agree with @Donna Cummings. LOVE this title! I definitely think it’s a keeper. 😀

  8. I love how you’ve blended fiction and history. Makes me want to hit Google and Wikipedia then go back and reread. Fantastic!

    (And I didn’t get a chance to thank you for commenting on my six last week, and this week, too. I value your feedback and encouragement, Angela. Thank you.)

  9. I love the combination of history and fiction. Perhaps someday I’ll go back and try again to write 19th century historical, since there are so many great possibilities.

  10. Your story is particularly intriguing because of the tale you’re weaving within historical objects and events. Nicely done, Angela. 🙂

  11. Nicely indignant tone in his voice. He really feels for the silver lady, for the neglect of this area of invention. That comes across very strongly. Well done.

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