Six Sentence Sunday – 10/21/12

Welcome to #SixSunday!

NEWS: This week MUST LOVE BREECHES won 1st place in FF&P’s On the Far Side contest in the time travel/steampunk/historical category and a full request from the judging editor. It also finaled yesterday in the Windy City Four Seasons Contest, paranormal category.

Today’s Six Sunday is from STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY, my steampunk romance set in Mobile, AL. I’m skipping a couple of lines from last week’s entry. Setup is that he’s just rescued a lady from a frightened horse on the busy streets of Mobile and the heroine witnessed it and in the part we’re skipping she exclaims how heroic he’d been. This is in his POV and he’s the first speaker:

“There was nothing heroic at all in my actions. Please, do not read more into it. It only required a calm demeanor and a firm hand.”

This didn’t seem to dispel her misconception. She only smiled, which lit up her whole face, her eyes dancing merrily. “You are too modest, sir, I know your game–I’m onto you.”

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30 Comments

  1. Nice six. Made me smile. There is nothing like a reluctant hero. :)

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  2. I like the the way you’ve paced her dialogue. Also, congrats on the win! You’re on a roll.

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  3. Jessica Subject

     /  October 21, 2012

    He is very modest. A cute six! And congrats on your win! :)

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  4. She’s up to something, or perhaps he is.

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  5. Love the “I’m onto you” part. Congrats on your news! :)

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  6. I’m so tickled about Breeches! And I’m enjoying Steam Me Up, too.

    Are they set in the same world?

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  7. Ha! Love that last line. ;)

    Congrats on the win!

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  8. Somebody’s crushin’ on Rawley (and so am I, LOL!). I think he’s a little flummoxed and attracted himself. Great six, and CONGRATS ON THE WIN AND THE FINAL!

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  9. Kate Meader

     /  October 21, 2012

    Congrats, Angela! When it rains, right? Great ending line here, love the dynamic.

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  10. Love her reaction. I get the feeling he’s gonna resist her seriously for a while then just totally cave. :)

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  11. Congratulations! Nice spark in their conversation.

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  12. Congrats on your great news with Breeches! That novel’s a winner. As for your six, their banter is great.

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  13. Congrats on the news, and great choice for this week’s six! However, I’m glad I get to hear lots more at the Open Mic nights. Lucky me! ;-)

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  14. I like a modest man! Congratulations on all the news and terrific six!

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  15. A firm hand is good for many things :D

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  16. Love their dialogue! Congrats on all your great news about MUST LOVE BREECHES – good luck! :)

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  17. It’s no use. She’s determined to have him be a hero. :) Congratulations on yet more well-deserved accolades for MLB and the Virile Viscount.

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  18. gayleramage

     /  October 21, 2012

    Oooh, wonderful snippet, especially that last line.

    Congrats on the win!

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  19. Monica Enderle Pierce

     /  October 21, 2012

    Doesn’t he know how attractive modesty will make him? And congrats on all your good news!

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  20. Aw, he’s sweet. A firm hand, I like him. Congratulations, a full request, you must be smiling.

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  21. WooHoo on the wins! I just know BREECHES is going to find a happy home. Love the story! (And your voice!) Really enjoying your current WIP, too. I wish I had some constructive feedback. All I have to say is, “More, please!”

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  22. Sounds like he knows horses.

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  23. Gorgeous language and a lovely sounding hero. Congratulations again on all your recent success! It must be such an exciting time for you. :)

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  24. And just what game would THAT be? ;-) Congratulations on the win! BTW, I don’t comment on every post you do, but I soooo love reading what you have to say. Always insightful. Always well-researched. You are awesome, Angela!

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  25. Congrats — AGAIN! Love these six. They remind me of Darcy and Lydia, him calm and direct, her choosing to interpret his remarks as flirty, no matter how innocent.

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  26. Congrats on the win and the full request! Everyone I visit today seems to have good news. Very cool.

    I love your hero’s voice. Can’t even put my finger on why, but I do.

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  27. I like how he’s a humble hero. And congratulations on your wins!

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  28. Woo hoo on the win! I’m so excited for all your great news lately. :) And this is a fun six — I like this hero. A calm demeanor and a firm hand could be very useful!

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  29. *Raises eyebrow* – love her reply to him! LOL. Also CONGRATULATIONS! You’re on a heck of a roll, my friend!

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  30. Oh my. As in all masterly curated excerpts, there’s an intriguing turn both in language and temperature here, that makes us crave more of the story.

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