Six Sentence Sunday – 8/19/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. 

Today’s Six Sunday is picking up where we left off last week with STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY, my steampunk romance set in Mobile, AL. Loki returns Rawley’s cravat that had flown away when Rawley landed in his hot air balloon, leaving him indecently clothed and giving the heroine her first peek at a man’s collarbone. Loki is a monkey and he’s wearing oyster shell armor, and Rawley asked if Loki was wearing oyster shells. This picks up with the heroine answering:

“Indeed, sir, it’s his armor and most prized possession.”

He quirked an eyebrow. “Intriguing.” He stood and wrapped the cravat around his neck several times and knotted it with an indifferent style. Now he was decently clothed. Drat.

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43 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 8/19/12

  1. Jessica Subject August 19, 2012 at 6:34 am #

    A cute six! :)

  2. L.j. Kentowski August 19, 2012 at 7:34 am #

    Damn, I hate it when they get dressed! Great 6!

  3. Donna Cummings August 19, 2012 at 8:10 am #

    Drat, indeed! Oh well — I’m sure the cravat can come off again. :)

  4. Stephanie/Elise August 19, 2012 at 8:18 am #

    Love this! That simple word, “Drat,” says so much about her character.

  5. Krystal Shannan (@KrystalShannan) August 19, 2012 at 8:40 am #

    Fun six :-)

  6. Cara Bristol August 19, 2012 at 9:21 am #

    I’m enjoying the voice and tone of this piece.

  7. Joyce Scarbrough August 19, 2012 at 9:26 am #

    I agree with the other commentors. The fun tone comes through with just a few words. Great six as usual!

  8. Jess Schira August 19, 2012 at 9:28 am #

    Fun six!

  9. Owllady/Marcia August 19, 2012 at 9:30 am #

    I expect now that she can’t see part of him, she’ll be thinking about it and maybe about how to more of his clothes off :) I like her personality.

  10. Kate August 19, 2012 at 9:36 am #

    Her disappointment is so entertaining!

  11. Linda Morris (@LMorrisWriter) August 19, 2012 at 9:41 am #

    Donna stole my response: Drat, indeed! Hopefully she’ll get to see his collarbone and much more later!

  12. Kate Meader (@KittyMeader) August 19, 2012 at 9:44 am #

    Love this six, especially that final “Drat.” I’d be tempted to move that to the next line for extra emphasis.

    • Angela Quarles August 19, 2012 at 9:47 am #

      ooh, good suggestions, thanks! It’s all in the pacing/timing, isn’t it?

  13. Mae Clair August 19, 2012 at 9:53 am #

    Such a fun six, Angela! I am so enjoying this one! :)

  14. S. J. Maylee August 19, 2012 at 9:54 am #

    Indifferent style, interesting, he’s captivated by his present company. Love the drat, it puts her feelings on full show.

  15. Carrie-Anne August 19, 2012 at 9:54 am #

    Very cute six! I love what it reveals about their characters.

  16. Dee Carney August 19, 2012 at 10:12 am #

    LOL! Love the “drat.”

  17. Sarah W August 19, 2012 at 10:24 am #

    I personally adore a good collarbone on a man . . . :)

  18. Joanne Stewart August 19, 2012 at 10:26 am #

    Hehe. Love the last line. Great six!

  19. Jenna Jaxon August 19, 2012 at 10:33 am #

    I find it interesting that Rawley ties his cravat in an “indifferent style.” Love that little character note. And the fact that she noticed the style (or lack thereof) but is more interested in what it covered up. Fun six!

  20. Silver James August 19, 2012 at 11:11 am #

    😆 I love her last mental comment! Drat indeed!

  21. ChristineWarner August 19, 2012 at 11:34 am #

    Great six…that last word says so much!

  22. jamieayres August 19, 2012 at 12:07 pm #

    Hahaha, I love this dialogue! P.S. Just to make you jealous, thought I’d let you know the fam and I are attending Star Wars Celebration VI in Orlando this coming weekend . . . I’ll be sure to blog about it:-)

    • Angela Quarles August 19, 2012 at 12:18 pm #

      Oh cool!, yes, please blog about it!! Have fun!!

  23. Paula Martin August 19, 2012 at 12:16 pm #

    Love that last word! It made me laugh.

  24. ellaquinnauthor August 19, 2012 at 12:22 pm #

    I agree. Loved the last word. Very cute six.

  25. Elin Gregory August 19, 2012 at 12:24 pm #

    So none of that nonsense about a “Mathematical” or “Waterfall” tie for him. I LIKE Rawley. Am still a bit wary of Loki though. That name+monkey can’t bode well.

  26. sueannbowlingauthor August 19, 2012 at 12:28 pm #

    I too loved the last word, too, but I’m still trying to picture Loki’s oyster shell armor.

  27. DasNuk August 19, 2012 at 12:31 pm #

    Great job and a very funny and cute punch line at the end!

  28. Carrie Crain August 19, 2012 at 12:44 pm #

    Such cuteness and lightheartedness. Cute, cute!!

  29. Sue August 19, 2012 at 1:10 pm #

    Drat indeed, indifferent style or not

  30. Ryan Derham August 19, 2012 at 1:14 pm #

    So her first peek at man’s “collarbone”?? Er, you really did mean collarbone! Lol Awesome six, Angela! I love these characters and the voice here. Nicely done!

  31. Amy Durham August 19, 2012 at 1:43 pm #

    Love the way her mind words… “Drat!” Your heroine comes across as spunky, which I like!

  32. Frank Fisher August 19, 2012 at 2:34 pm #

    Love the last line…I take it he doesn’t like to be fully clothed? Fun six Angela!

  33. J.M. Blackman August 19, 2012 at 2:42 pm #

    I like that his style was indifferent; it’s nice to see how much attention she pays to his movements. Like the details and love their dialogue.

  34. Sandra Sookoo August 19, 2012 at 6:44 pm #

    Dang it! LOL Loved it!

  35. Teresa Cypher August 19, 2012 at 6:45 pm #

    “Drat.” Love it, Angela! That Loki–what a catalyst 😉

  36. Lila Shaw August 19, 2012 at 8:14 pm #

    Oh, phooey, no more glimpses of bare neck and the v portion of his chest. Loved the ‘drat’.

  37. veronicascott August 20, 2012 at 10:28 pm #

    We can only hope he becomes indecently um clothed again at some point LOL! Really enjoying this story from all aspects, terrific six!

  38. Curt Rowe (@soriyo) August 22, 2012 at 12:12 pm #

    Wouldn’t you say “in an indifferent style” if you are referring to the style of the tie? I read “with an indifferent style” as how he goes about tying it, much like saying “with indifference”. Not an expert so take this with a grain of salt.
    Not what I typically read, but the lines made me curious as to what happened next especially ending it in “drat”.

  39. themadwarlock August 26, 2012 at 8:51 am #

    Its such a tight six, and the simple Drat ties it up perfectly. I’ve never written steampunk, but I’m so intrigued by it, I’ll definitely want to read more.

  40. sarahballance September 1, 2012 at 7:47 pm #

    This is a most intriguing scene – I love it!

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