Six Sentence Sunday – 6/24/12 – Meet the Hero

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. Last week we saw her fantasize about the destruction of her boss’ office by her monkey Loki. Afterwards, she is in her backyard reliving and embellishing on that day dream, when a hot air balloon invades her dream, piloted by a black-haired, blue-eyed man. (See this post that wasn’t part of SixSunday for an excerpt) The balloon is real, and she chastises herself for using such a description for his eyes as “blue blue” and tries to come up with the right description while she watches him try to land. One of the options she comes up with is ‘beetle blue’ and the dialogue is from the man:

“Help! Confounded thing.”

Beetle blue? Not very romantic. But there were those little beetles that had that iridescent underbelly…

“Are you of any use, woman?”

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36 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 6/24/12 – Meet the Hero

  1. L.J. Kentowski June 24, 2012 at 7:28 am #

    LOL. At least she found a way to explain it away! Loved it! Great six!

  2. Jessica Subject June 24, 2012 at 7:38 am #

    An interesting six! We’ve recently found some bright red beetles in our garden that we’ve never seen before. They come in such amazing colors.

  3. Stephanie June 24, 2012 at 8:16 am #

    Hah! I know exactly the beetle and blue you’re talking about. I’m thinking they’re Matt Bomer eyes :) Here’s hoping she snaps out of it long enough to really capture his attention.

  4. Lisa Fox June 24, 2012 at 8:21 am #

    Lol! I’ve never seen blue beetles but it must be quite a color!

  5. Linda Morris (@LMorrisWriter) June 24, 2012 at 8:31 am #

    Good vivid description. I can imagine the color perfectly!

  6. Donna Cummings June 24, 2012 at 8:32 am #

    I’m glad she explained the bettle blue, since I wasn’t sure what it was like. NOW I want to see his eyes — they sound beautiful. :)

  7. S. J. Maylee June 24, 2012 at 8:45 am #

    I love the contrast between his lines and hers, cool 6

  8. J.M. Blackman June 24, 2012 at 9:34 am #

    Lol! This is one of those times in a book where you’d laugh out loud in the middle of an airport and everyone would turn and look at you like sthu. Anyway, I know what she means by beetle blue and if his eyes are like that, my goodness, they’re purty. Great 6, Angela. Loved it.

  9. Alix Cameron June 24, 2012 at 9:36 am #

    Wonderful six!

  10. Cera duBois June 24, 2012 at 9:43 am #

    LOL… Great six!

  11. Owllady/Marcia June 24, 2012 at 9:46 am #

    Hi Angela. Cute Six! She’ll probably be able to help, once she gets over those eyes. :)

  12. Joyce Scarbrough June 24, 2012 at 9:55 am #

    Blue discussions are always fine with me! Love the way she doesn’t let his predicament stop her assessment!

  13. Elin Gregory June 24, 2012 at 10:24 am #

    Love this. And she can’t very well excuse herself by saying she was trying to pin point the colour of his eyes. 😀

  14. K.E. Saxon June 24, 2012 at 10:26 am #

    Lovin’ this story. Sooo, I’m trying to get a broader image of the story itself: Is she in the present time, and now this guy is coming from the Victorian era (so time-travel FORWARD?) Love that you set it in Alabama. Nice twist on the steampunk theme. His eyes sound gorgeous. Great six!!

    • Angela Quarles June 24, 2012 at 10:28 am #

      Nope, it’s set in 1890, no time travel in this one… :)

  15. Sue June 24, 2012 at 10:39 am #

    may not be romantic description but it works beautifully and just from these short lines we get a feeling for his character. Good stuff

  16. Cara Bristol June 24, 2012 at 10:39 am #

    Love his line. Such frustration revealed in dialog.

  17. DeAnna Felthauser June 24, 2012 at 10:45 am #

    Cute six with great description! Beetle blue means he has gorgeous eyes. :)

  18. Gemma Parkes June 24, 2012 at 11:24 am #

    Love the exchange between them!

  19. Silver James June 24, 2012 at 11:27 am #

    I know the exact color of his eyes! LOL And I do love his last line. It’s perfect. Well played, Angela!

  20. ellaquinnauthor June 24, 2012 at 12:26 pm #

    This sounds like it’s going to be an interesting book.

  21. Carrie-Anne June 24, 2012 at 1:14 pm #

    Cute description of the color!

  22. sueannbowlingauthor June 24, 2012 at 1:18 pm #

    Not a good way to begin a relationship! By the way, can she really see the color of his eyes at that distance?

    • Angela Quarles June 24, 2012 at 1:29 pm #

      He’s not that far away. He’s about to touch ground…

  23. veronicascott June 24, 2012 at 1:35 pm #

    Yup, I’ve seen those bugs, in Alabama! She needs to focus a bit more on the present moment perhaps LOL, if his eyes are that great, probably the rest of him is too! Great six!

  24. Kate Warren June 24, 2012 at 1:39 pm #

    Oh, that was good! I’ll never look at beetles the same way again… I hope next week we find out whether or not she is of any use. Though personally I’d rather see Loki save the day. :)

  25. siobhanmuir June 24, 2012 at 2:09 pm #

    I can see him standing there, staring at her in frustration. Fun six, Angela. :)

  26. Sadie Hart June 24, 2012 at 3:15 pm #

    LOL I’ve been busted in a day dream or two. Hope she manages to help him. 😉

  27. Babette James June 24, 2012 at 3:19 pm #

    I love how she was trying to decide on the color. I have to say I did question how she could see the color when he’s in the balloon. It made me think if she’s close enough to see his eyes, she better move out of the way fast.

  28. wendysrusso June 24, 2012 at 5:20 pm #

    I love how you depict the distraction. :)

  29. A.S. Fenichel June 24, 2012 at 7:31 pm #

    That’s so funny!

  30. Kylie Scott June 24, 2012 at 7:37 pm #

    Love it! Her thoughts are so delightfully random and fun! You are powering on these days, Angela. My hat is off.

  31. epbeaumont June 24, 2012 at 7:59 pm #

    One’s choice of similes tells worlds–this is another Fabulous Nerd Girl, eh what? Love the looks of this one.

    PS great links on your previous post; I’m reading them now.

  32. Sarah W June 24, 2012 at 8:00 pm #

    “Are you of any use, woman?”

    If your heroine is anything like your usual female characters, them’s fightin’ words! 😀

  33. Jess Schira June 25, 2012 at 5:10 am #

    I like the description, and the slightly scattered way her mind works. Nice job with this six!

  34. Wildcat's Wife June 25, 2012 at 10:09 am #

    What a colorful imagination she has! I like that he invaded her daydream. Good six!!

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