Six Sentence Sunday – 6/24/12 – Meet the Hero

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. Last week we saw her fantasize about the destruction of her boss’ office by her monkey Loki. Afterwards, she is in her backyard reliving and embellishing on that day dream, when a hot air balloon invades her dream, piloted by a black-haired, blue-eyed man. (See this post that wasn’t part of SixSunday for an excerpt) The balloon is real, and she chastises herself for using such a description for his eyes as “blue blue” and tries to come up with the right description while she watches him try to land. One of the options she comes up with is ‘beetle blue’ and the dialogue is from the man:

“Help! Confounded thing.”

Beetle blue? Not very romantic. But there were those little beetles that had that iridescent underbelly…

“Are you of any use, woman?”

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  1. L.J. Kentowski

     /  June 24, 2012

    LOL. At least she found a way to explain it away! Loved it! Great six!

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  2. Jessica Subject

     /  June 24, 2012

    An interesting six! We’ve recently found some bright red beetles in our garden that we’ve never seen before. They come in such amazing colors.

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  3. Hah! I know exactly the beetle and blue you’re talking about. I’m thinking they’re Matt Bomer eyes :) Here’s hoping she snaps out of it long enough to really capture his attention.

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  4. Lol! I’ve never seen blue beetles but it must be quite a color!

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  5. Good vivid description. I can imagine the color perfectly!

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  6. I’m glad she explained the bettle blue, since I wasn’t sure what it was like. NOW I want to see his eyes — they sound beautiful. :)

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  7. I love the contrast between his lines and hers, cool 6

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  8. J.M. Blackman

     /  June 24, 2012

    Lol! This is one of those times in a book where you’d laugh out loud in the middle of an airport and everyone would turn and look at you like sthu. Anyway, I know what she means by beetle blue and if his eyes are like that, my goodness, they’re purty. Great 6, Angela. Loved it.

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  9. Wonderful six!

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  10. LOL… Great six!

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  11. Hi Angela. Cute Six! She’ll probably be able to help, once she gets over those eyes. :)

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  12. Blue discussions are always fine with me! Love the way she doesn’t let his predicament stop her assessment!

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  13. Love this. And she can’t very well excuse herself by saying she was trying to pin point the colour of his eyes. :D

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  14. Lovin’ this story. Sooo, I’m trying to get a broader image of the story itself: Is she in the present time, and now this guy is coming from the Victorian era (so time-travel FORWARD?) Love that you set it in Alabama. Nice twist on the steampunk theme. His eyes sound gorgeous. Great six!!

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  15. may not be romantic description but it works beautifully and just from these short lines we get a feeling for his character. Good stuff

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  16. Love his line. Such frustration revealed in dialog.

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  17. Cute six with great description! Beetle blue means he has gorgeous eyes. :)

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  18. Love the exchange between them!

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  19. I know the exact color of his eyes! LOL And I do love his last line. It’s perfect. Well played, Angela!

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  20. This sounds like it’s going to be an interesting book.

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  21. Cute description of the color!

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  22. Not a good way to begin a relationship! By the way, can she really see the color of his eyes at that distance?

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  23. Yup, I’ve seen those bugs, in Alabama! She needs to focus a bit more on the present moment perhaps LOL, if his eyes are that great, probably the rest of him is too! Great six!

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  24. Oh, that was good! I’ll never look at beetles the same way again… I hope next week we find out whether or not she is of any use. Though personally I’d rather see Loki save the day. :)

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  25. siobhanmuir

     /  June 24, 2012

    I can see him standing there, staring at her in frustration. Fun six, Angela. :)

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  26. LOL I’ve been busted in a day dream or two. Hope she manages to help him. ;-)

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  27. I love how she was trying to decide on the color. I have to say I did question how she could see the color when he’s in the balloon. It made me think if she’s close enough to see his eyes, she better move out of the way fast.

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  28. I love how you depict the distraction. :)

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  29. That’s so funny!

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  30. Love it! Her thoughts are so delightfully random and fun! You are powering on these days, Angela. My hat is off.

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  31. One’s choice of similes tells worlds–this is another Fabulous Nerd Girl, eh what? Love the looks of this one.

    PS great links on your previous post; I’m reading them now.

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  32. “Are you of any use, woman?”

    If your heroine is anything like your usual female characters, them’s fightin’ words! :D

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  33. I like the description, and the slightly scattered way her mind works. Nice job with this six!

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  34. Wildcat's Wife

     /  June 25, 2012

    What a colorful imagination she has! I like that he invaded her daydream. Good six!!

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