Six Sentence Sunday – 6/17/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

I apologize for being largely absent last Sunday visiting y’all! Our power went out from the storm at 9 a.m. and we didn’t get it back on until that evening, combined with family visiting it proved too much… I WILL visit today!

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. The female protagonist is a reporter and she’s marched into the office of her boss to demand to write more challenging pieces. He’s being a jerk and she starts to day dream about her pet monkey, Loki, wreaking havoc on Mr. Tonti’s desk. Then, as he continued being a jerk and ignoring her, it progressed to this. When I wrote this, I had not idea the heroine had such a violent streak.

Now Loki was pulling out his left eyeball in her imagination. A nice satisfying pop as it came free. Now the other one. Yes, and with other items plucked off his person, Loki juggling them on his desk. And still Mr. Tonti worked on, unfazed.

His face turned up and glared at her with his healthy and decidedly whole eyes.

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45 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 6/17/12

  1. Stephanie June 17, 2012 at 6:49 am #

    Suck wicked thoughts for a delicate lady, lol! She sounds like a real firecracker, that one. :)

  2. Donna Cummings June 17, 2012 at 8:04 am #

    LOL — I like her imagination — it’s a great way to deal with frustration! And I hope you don’t have storms to deal with this week. :)

  3. Joyce Scarbrough June 17, 2012 at 9:09 am #

    I love a girl who’s not afraid to envision dismemberment! 😉

  4. Cara Bristol June 17, 2012 at 9:10 am #

    Yuck – plucking out eyeballs? Creative imagination — and writing.

  5. Joya Fields June 17, 2012 at 9:39 am #

    Wow, heck of a visual for this six! LOL. Love her spunk. Glad the storms are gone and you are safe. :)

  6. E. P. Beaumont June 17, 2012 at 9:49 am #

    Sounds like an ordinary day at work to me. :) Nothing more appalling than jerks with power.

  7. Joanne Stewart June 17, 2012 at 9:52 am #

    haha! Oh my. Something tells me you don’t want to tick her off! Yup, love her spunk and her imagination!

  8. ellaquinnauthor June 17, 2012 at 10:05 am #

    She is bloodthirsty and vengefull.

  9. Owllady/Marcia June 17, 2012 at 10:17 am #

    Cool Six Angela. I love writing scenes out just to discover what my characters are capable of. As you’ve discovered, some of the best stuff comes out that way! 😀

  10. Tonya Burrows June 17, 2012 at 10:45 am #

    Haha, don’t you love it when your character surprises you like that? Besides, who does like a little bit of fun dismemberment?


    Um, anybody? Bueller?

  11. Lea June 17, 2012 at 11:06 am #

    Ooohh…I like her. Bloodthirsty wench she sounds like and Loki’s quite the accomplice, yeah? Great job.

  12. Jasmine Aherne June 17, 2012 at 11:09 am #

    I approve of her imagination!!

  13. Sue June 17, 2012 at 11:42 am #

    boy she really hates the guy – and has a blood thirsty imagination. I note she doesn’t do this damage but the monkey does.

  14. veronicascott June 17, 2012 at 12:13 pm #

    Ewww! But inagoodway…that “pop” was very effective! Terrific excerpt!

  15. Gem June 17, 2012 at 12:34 pm #

    Nice insight into how her mind works and Mr. Tonti’s attitude.

  16. Cera duBois June 17, 2012 at 12:48 pm #

    LOL…. Violent streak is right… Great six!

  17. K.E. Saxon June 17, 2012 at 12:50 pm #

    LOLOLOL! This is too good! Lovin’ your heroine, lovin’ the monkey–and the name for her boss: “Mr. Tonti” PERFECT. Even his name makes him sound tight-assed and assholish. Great six!

  18. Monica Enderle Pierce June 17, 2012 at 1:21 pm #

    Violent streak? No, my dear. Right now it’s just a wickedly wonderful imagination. It becomes a streak when she starts leaving streaks on the wall, if you know what I mean. 😉

  19. sueannbowlingauthor June 17, 2012 at 1:53 pm #

    Love her imagination. BTW, as a Jane Austin fan, you might be interested that our author booth at the farmers’ market is right next to that of a quiller. She pointed me to quilling in Sense and Sensibility–I’ll have to reread to find the place. Also get some photos of her work for my blog.

    • Angela Quarles June 17, 2012 at 1:57 pm #

      That’s so cool, and even more intriguing is that you have an author booth! I might have to look into that here for our market on the square!

  20. Paula Martin June 17, 2012 at 2:50 pm #

    What a great imagination she has!

  21. Lila Shaw June 17, 2012 at 3:09 pm #

    Yes, women have Walter Mitty moments too, even if they have to train their monkey to do the dirty work. LOL

  22. siobhanmuir June 17, 2012 at 3:12 pm #

    LOL, I’ve had vivid moments like this. Fun six, Angela. :)

  23. Karla Doyle June 17, 2012 at 3:20 pm #

    Eww, ick! But that’s a good thing, right? Cute six. :)

  24. Ryan Derham June 17, 2012 at 3:58 pm #

    Thata boy…er, monkey, Loki! Day dreams of dismemberment, huh? *shudders* Lol Great work, Angela!

  25. gzidar June 17, 2012 at 4:22 pm #

    Such a cheeky monkey :-) There must have been something wicked in your coffee the day you came up with that… great six.

    • Angela Quarles June 17, 2012 at 4:30 pm #

      yeah, it surprised me too. It was my first day writing out my first scene of this new story….

  26. Kylie Scott June 17, 2012 at 5:20 pm #

    Cool! What a great way to show her thoughts and feelings. Love it, Angela.

  27. Sandra Sookoo June 17, 2012 at 5:30 pm #

    Very original snippet. Nicely done!

  28. Elin Gregory June 17, 2012 at 5:38 pm #

    Ooh, a little touch of horror there. Very good.

  29. Cate Masters June 17, 2012 at 5:57 pm #

    Love her dark side. :)

  30. L.J. Kentowski June 17, 2012 at 6:13 pm #

    OMG.. that was morbid but oh so hilarious! Now I don’t feel so bad in my visualizations of coworkers LOL Great six Angela!

  31. S. J. Maylee June 17, 2012 at 6:44 pm #

    Gross, but I totally get her agitation, lol. I hope you just wrote what she told you. I wouldn’t want to mess with a character that has that imagination 😉

    • Angela Quarles June 17, 2012 at 6:46 pm #

      LOL, yep, I pretty much obeyed her, even when she said things that made me shake my head.

  32. Mae Clair June 17, 2012 at 6:46 pm #

    Go, Loki! Even if it’s only in her head, it’s nice to get the upper hand. I have a feeling her boss deserved the dismemberment!

  33. Wildcat's Wife June 17, 2012 at 6:51 pm #

    Wicked! You know what they say? Monkeys see no evil. Teehee!!

  34. Eleri Stone June 17, 2012 at 7:03 pm #

    LOL. She has a twisted imagination. I like her!

  35. Jess Schira June 17, 2012 at 7:23 pm #

    I like the way her mind works!

  36. Karysa Faire June 17, 2012 at 10:15 pm #

    LOL. A new twist on visualizing someone naked. And Loki doing the damage (instead of visualizing herself doing it) makes it palatable and even humorous. :-)

  37. Amy Durham June 18, 2012 at 9:23 am #

    Ha! What imagination! Love this six!

  38. A.S. Fenichel June 18, 2012 at 10:19 am #

    Very interesting imagination. Great six!

  39. J.M. Blackman June 18, 2012 at 9:12 pm #

    She seems to be totally different from your heroine in BREECHES. It’s an cool difference. She’s clearly not shy of the dark and twisted. I just love that her fantasy is completed through Loki.

  40. Lorraine Paton June 20, 2012 at 10:58 pm #

    LOL! Wow – what a vivid imagination she has! Loki must be very talented too. :)

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