Six Sentence Sunday – 6/17/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. Today I’m sharing sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only last month ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

I apologize for being largely absent last Sunday visiting y’all! Our power went out from the storm at 9 a.m. and we didn’t get it back on until that evening, combined with family visiting it proved too much… I WILL visit today!

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. The female protagonist is a reporter and she’s marched into the office of her boss to demand to write more challenging pieces. He’s being a jerk and she starts to day dream about her pet monkey, Loki, wreaking havoc on Mr. Tonti’s desk. Then, as he continued being a jerk and ignoring her, it progressed to this. When I wrote this, I had not idea the heroine had such a violent streak.

Now Loki was pulling out his left eyeball in her imagination. A nice satisfying pop as it came free. Now the other one. Yes, and with other items plucked off his person, Loki juggling them on his desk. And still Mr. Tonti worked on, unfazed.

His face turned up and glared at her with his healthy and decidedly whole eyes.

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45 Comments

  1. Suck wicked thoughts for a delicate lady, lol! She sounds like a real firecracker, that one. :)

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  2. LOL — I like her imagination — it’s a great way to deal with frustration! And I hope you don’t have storms to deal with this week. :)

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  3. I love a girl who’s not afraid to envision dismemberment! ;-)

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  4. Yuck – plucking out eyeballs? Creative imagination — and writing.

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  5. Wow, heck of a visual for this six! LOL. Love her spunk. Glad the storms are gone and you are safe. :)

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  6. Sounds like an ordinary day at work to me. :) Nothing more appalling than jerks with power.

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  7. haha! Oh my. Something tells me you don’t want to tick her off! Yup, love her spunk and her imagination!

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  8. She is bloodthirsty and vengefull.

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  9. Cool Six Angela. I love writing scenes out just to discover what my characters are capable of. As you’ve discovered, some of the best stuff comes out that way! :D

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  10. Haha, don’t you love it when your character surprises you like that? Besides, who does like a little bit of fun dismemberment?

    *crickets*

    Um, anybody? Bueller?

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  11. Ooohh…I like her. Bloodthirsty wench she sounds like and Loki’s quite the accomplice, yeah? Great job.

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  12. I approve of her imagination!!

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  13. boy she really hates the guy – and has a blood thirsty imagination. I note she doesn’t do this damage but the monkey does.

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  14. Ewww! But inagoodway…that “pop” was very effective! Terrific excerpt!

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  15. Gem

     /  June 17, 2012

    Nice insight into how her mind works and Mr. Tonti’s attitude.

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  16. LOL…. Violent streak is right… Great six!

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  17. LOLOLOL! This is too good! Lovin’ your heroine, lovin’ the monkey–and the name for her boss: “Mr. Tonti” PERFECT. Even his name makes him sound tight-assed and assholish. Great six!

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  18. Monica Enderle Pierce

     /  June 17, 2012

    Violent streak? No, my dear. Right now it’s just a wickedly wonderful imagination. It becomes a streak when she starts leaving streaks on the wall, if you know what I mean. ;)

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  19. Love her imagination. BTW, as a Jane Austin fan, you might be interested that our author booth at the farmers’ market is right next to that of a quiller. She pointed me to quilling in Sense and Sensibility–I’ll have to reread to find the place. Also get some photos of her work for my blog.

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    • That’s so cool, and even more intriguing is that you have an author booth! I might have to look into that here for our market on the square!

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  20. What a great imagination she has!

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  21. Yes, women have Walter Mitty moments too, even if they have to train their monkey to do the dirty work. LOL

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  22. siobhanmuir

     /  June 17, 2012

    LOL, I’ve had vivid moments like this. Fun six, Angela. :)

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  23. Eww, ick! But that’s a good thing, right? Cute six. :)

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  24. Thata boy…er, monkey, Loki! Day dreams of dismemberment, huh? *shudders* Lol Great work, Angela!

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  25. Such a cheeky monkey :-) There must have been something wicked in your coffee the day you came up with that… great six.

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  26. Cool! What a great way to show her thoughts and feelings. Love it, Angela.

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  27. Very original snippet. Nicely done!

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  28. Ooh, a little touch of horror there. Very good.

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  29. Love her dark side. :)

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  30. OMG.. that was morbid but oh so hilarious! Now I don’t feel so bad in my visualizations of coworkers LOL Great six Angela!

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  31. Gross, but I totally get her agitation, lol. I hope you just wrote what she told you. I wouldn’t want to mess with a character that has that imagination ;)

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  32. Go, Loki! Even if it’s only in her head, it’s nice to get the upper hand. I have a feeling her boss deserved the dismemberment!

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  33. Wildcat's Wife

     /  June 17, 2012

    Wicked! You know what they say? Monkeys see no evil. Teehee!!

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  34. LOL. She has a twisted imagination. I like her!

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  35. I like the way her mind works!

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  36. LOL. A new twist on visualizing someone naked. And Loki doing the damage (instead of visualizing herself doing it) makes it palatable and even humorous. :-)

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  37. Ha! What imagination! Love this six!

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  38. Very interesting imagination. Great six!

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  39. J.M. Blackman

     /  June 18, 2012

    She seems to be totally different from your heroine in BREECHES. It’s an cool difference. She’s clearly not shy of the dark and twisted. I just love that her fantasy is completed through Loki.

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  40. LOL! Wow – what a vivid imagination she has! Loki must be very talented too. :)

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