Six Sentence Sunday – 2/19/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP tentatively titled MUST LOVE BREECHES. Today is also in the thick of Mardi Gras here in Mobile, so I will try to make the rounds this morning, but might not be able to return comments until after Fat Tuesday :)

Here’s my new pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies.  (You can see the other entries here.)

I thought I’d pick up exactly where I left off last week, when Isabelle’s friend said a guy was a “breech-ripper.” Seeing the comments, it made me realize I needed to have her react to the term, so here’s my next six:

Isabelle choked on her drink—they’d just been discussing their favorite ‘bodice ripper’ romances. She’d  discovered they shared a mutual obsession with guys in period clothes, which had helped propel her through the early stages of the party. Since this was the first time they’d hung out, she treated this moment delicately, afraid to puncture the mood. To have another friend in London would be wonderful.

A sharp elbow in her side caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass. “Look sharp,” Anna said, her voice low with just a dollop of teasing, “here comes Andrew.”

Does this work? As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here. Another participant writing time travel is Gayle Ramage.

Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! Have a great Sunday!

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51 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 2/19/12

  1. laurakayeauthorye February 19, 2012 at 7:04 am #

    I didn’t read last week’s 6, but your snippet had me chuckling and wanting more!

  2. Stephanie February 19, 2012 at 7:33 am #

    Yes, it totally works. Very cute! :)

  3. Jennifer Lowery~Author February 19, 2012 at 7:47 am #

    Yes, it works!! Can’t wait to meet Andrew :) Love your six.

  4. Lisa Fox February 19, 2012 at 7:51 am #

    Ooo, Andrew! This sounds promising.

    Happy Mardi Gras!

  5. Cara Bristol February 19, 2012 at 9:11 am #

    Crisp writing. I like it.

  6. Carly Fall February 19, 2012 at 9:32 am #

    It works perfectly with last weeks six – which I’m still laughing about!

    Great job, Angela!

  7. Joanne Stewart February 19, 2012 at 9:37 am #

    I think it works wonderfully! Definitely had me chuckling as well. And now I’m intrigued to find out who Andrew is.

  8. Ranae Rose February 19, 2012 at 9:44 am #

    LOL Well at least she’s found a friend who shares her passion. :)

  9. Cindy Dwyer February 19, 2012 at 9:44 am #

    Happy Mardi Gras! Unfortunately it’s just another Sunday here in the northeast.

    I loved her drink flirting with the rim of the glass – very nice visual.

  10. Kate Meader February 19, 2012 at 9:54 am #

    Lovely. I especially enjoyed how you slipped in how lonely she is. One minor point: you repeat “sharp” in that last section – sharp elbow and look sharp. Very evocative six.

  11. Corinne Davies February 19, 2012 at 10:00 am #

    Great reaction :)
    We have a long weekend up here but nothing as fun as Mardi Gras! Have fun :)

  12. J.C. Martin February 19, 2012 at 10:01 am #

    Very relatable event, new girl in town trying to fit in and to meet new boys. :)

  13. jennajaxon February 19, 2012 at 10:12 am #

    And just who does NOT have an obsession with men in period clothes? LOL This sounds like my kind of party. :) Great six! Loved “caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass.”

  14. K.E. Saxon February 19, 2012 at 10:16 am #

    Hi Angela! So glad you picked up where you left off last Sunday. I adore this: “caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass”. Excellent phrasing. I can tell this is going to be such a cute, romantic story. Great six, and have fun at Mardi Gras! (Lucky girl :D)

  15. Sarah W February 19, 2012 at 10:27 am #

    I love that phrase, “flirting with the rim of her glass.” It’s clever and fits the mood!

  16. D'Ann Linscott-Dunham February 19, 2012 at 10:44 am #

    Oh, great! I wanna read this whole book!

  17. Skye Warren February 19, 2012 at 10:53 am #

    Very cute. Like the wordplay – dollop of teasing :)

  18. S. J. Maylee February 19, 2012 at 10:55 am #

    a friend is always nice!! flirt with the rim and a dollop of teasing, I love it!! such fun

  19. Monica Enderle Pierce February 19, 2012 at 11:09 am #

    I love how you’re setting up Isabelle (and the reader) for her upcoming time travel. Very simple, but skillfully done.

  20. Sandra Sookoo February 19, 2012 at 11:21 am #

    Loved it!

  21. Cera duBois February 19, 2012 at 11:34 am #

    Fantastic six… makes me want to read more!!!

  22. akismet-6d8c6e938dc54999b0472f760d60bc83 February 19, 2012 at 11:47 am #

    Love this!

  23. sassyspeaks February 19, 2012 at 11:48 am #

    Mardi Gras already? how time flies – yes I loved the glass line too and love the whole story line

  24. Rachel Morgan February 19, 2012 at 12:06 pm #

    “caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass” – gorgeous line :-)

  25. Cate Masters February 19, 2012 at 12:24 pm #

    Fun scene! Wonderful description, and love her reaction, tee hee

  26. Jennifer Comeaux February 19, 2012 at 12:33 pm #

    I’m another one who loves the line “caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass” – it fits the romantic theme very well :) Happy Mardi Gras! I used to love parades when I was a kid (I live outside New Orleans) but hardly go to them anymore.

  27. sueannbowlingauthor February 19, 2012 at 12:34 pm #

    Love it. I take it she’s visiting London in our own time, before the time travel?

    • angela quarles February 19, 2012 at 1:20 pm #

      Yep in a couple pages she accidentally wishes herself back

  28. Jean Marie Ward February 19, 2012 at 12:40 pm #

    Friends make everything better, and I loved the drink flirting with the rim of her glass. Great six!

  29. Ryan February 19, 2012 at 1:05 pm #

    It works perfectly, Angela. Amusing and absorbing six!

  30. Ginger Simpson February 19, 2012 at 1:11 pm #

    Perfect. I loved the drink flirting with the rim. Quite original, I must say. Mind if I use it? *lol*

  31. J.M. Blackman February 19, 2012 at 1:37 pm #

    I feel like it works perfectly. You’ve got great imagery, wording and “mood-creation” here. I think you’ve created a very realistic scene. Great six, Angela.

  32. Lynne Murray February 19, 2012 at 1:57 pm #

    Excellent use of several senses to put us in the scene–and inspire a desire to see more of Andrew!

  33. Sandra Bunino February 19, 2012 at 2:30 pm #

    Happy Mardi Gras! Fantastic six, I love a good time travel story.

  34. A.K. Morgen February 19, 2012 at 2:36 pm #

    It works great. I love that you included her reaction to the ‘breech-ripper’ term. :)

  35. michelle February 19, 2012 at 2:55 pm #

    I loved it. I liked the “bodice ripper” line. :)

    Great six,
    Michelle :)

    http://www.michelle-pickett.com

  36. Carrie-Anne February 19, 2012 at 2:59 pm #

    Fun six!

  37. Silver February 19, 2012 at 3:14 pm #

    A sharp elbow in her side caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass.

    Love this image! And I like the tagline, too. This book sounds like it’ll be a lot of fun to read.

  38. Nick Kelly February 19, 2012 at 5:21 pm #

    I think this was the perfect way to post this week, after so many writers’ reactions last week. I really like the banter between the two.

  39. sarahballance February 19, 2012 at 6:27 pm #

    I love how she chokes on her drink! I enjoyed this – great job!

  40. Kate Warren February 19, 2012 at 6:36 pm #

    Yep, that works.

  41. Ruthie February 19, 2012 at 6:54 pm #

    I think so! I like her fear of “puncturing” the mood. Nice verb.

  42. E. P. Beaumont February 19, 2012 at 7:14 pm #

    Funny moment at a party, and nothing bonds like laughter. Anna sounds fun to hang out with… not bad for a fictional person.

  43. Cindy Carroll February 19, 2012 at 7:31 pm #

    Great 6. I thought it worked. I really liked the flirt with the rim of her glass.

  44. Sadie Hart February 19, 2012 at 8:06 pm #

    Love this: A sharp elbow in her side caused her drink to flirt with the rim of her glass. “Look sharp,” Anna said, her voice low with just a dollop of teasing, “here comes Andrew.” It’s a great visual, nicely jarring her out of her mental wandering and I absolutely love the word ‘dollop.’ I think it ties in very nicely with last week’s, and makes the breeches-ripper statement work.

  45. Melynda Price February 20, 2012 at 10:43 am #

    This six does paint a fantastic visual. Very well done! Anna’s lighthearted personality makes her a fun read :)

  46. alicebeesley February 20, 2012 at 3:31 pm #

    I works for me!

  47. Karysa Faire February 20, 2012 at 3:49 pm #

    Ditto to what everyone else said. This is such a fun story. :-)

    (Sorry I’m a little late to the Sunday party, but I was at PantheaCon until this morning–wish I could be where you are, though!)

  48. Julia Phillips Smith February 20, 2012 at 6:08 pm #

    What Sadie Hart said.

  49. Gayle Ramage February 21, 2012 at 2:32 pm #

    Definitely works! Fab six as always (and cheers for the mention!) 😀

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