Six Sentence Sunday – 6/10/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I know some of you wanted to see what happened next in BEER AND GROPING IN LAS VEGAS, but I’ve had to take a step back from that this past week, so instead, I’m sharing the first 6 sentences of my new novel, STEAM ME UP, RAWLEY. I finished the rough draft only 2 weeks ago, so this is pretty rough. It’ll probably get revised a ton, but this will give you a rough idea.

This is a steampunk romance set in 1890 Mobile, Alabama, and a loose sequel to MUST LOVE BREECHES. The female protagonist is a reporter.

Adele de la Pointe screeched to a stop on her Davenport Horizon Electric Cell Tricycle, or Miss Smarty Pants for short. She grabbed Loki, her armored pet monkey, and pulled him up to her shoulders; better to navigate the bowels of The Mobile Register.

“Nchht niiik chtniii.”

“I know, Loki, I know.”

She reached up and ruffled the fur under his chin. Loki nuzzled her cheek, the chinstrap securing his oyster-shell helmet chaffing her ear.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! UPDATE: Our power has been out since this morning from the Gulf Coast Deluge so I may be late getting to visit y’all!

35 Replies to “Six Sentence Sunday – 6/10/12”

  1. That defnitely plunked me into the scene. Love her name, love the Electric Cell Tricycle, love the idea of an armored pet monkey. A winning opening!

  2. Angela, you do a terrific job of setting, action, and personality in wonderfully succinct sentences. Well done! I’m looking forward to more of this one, even if it’s rough.(Though it doesn’t read that rough to me!)

  3. I’m with everyone else. Love the monkey! Oh I wanted to congratulate you on the request through Entangled via the open pitch the other week. Love steampunk and the armored pet monkey is priceless.

  4. Well your new character, who certainly sounds like a unique personality, would not fit in with the “ton” from Breeches. She is definately too much fun 😀

  5. I love that she rides not a bicycle, but a *tricycle*! Loads of character built into your details in this. (And I had no idea that you speak Monkey, too. Eeeka eeka, oowhaww uk-uk-uk.)

  6. This is good for a draft, and don’t worry about the revisions you may face…part of the whole writing process. Love how the tricycle is nicknamed Miss Smarty Pants – very creative and adds humor!

  7. LOL, terrific stuff but am I the only one who finds monkeys incredibly creepy and sinister? And talking monkeys in armour – OMG that’s scary! You heroine seems to me to be completely formidable.

  8. Great six, Angela. You really captured the essence of the genre and the period. Nicely done. 🙂

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