Six Sentence Sunday – 5/27/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’m eager to share lines from my new short story BEER AND GROPING IN LAS VEGAS. If all goes as planned, I’ll have my polishing done and this will be going out on submission by Tuesday. Wish me luck!

Last week, Riley met his blind date for the night. Fast forward past dinner, and things have gotten serious, fast. They are now in an elevator, and Riley’s told her he wants her in a bad way, but extracts a promise that they be totally honest with each other and asks if she wants this (his hands are holding her face. her response, in her POV):

Tapping a seldom used inner streak of boldness, she moved her head to kiss his palm. She darted her tongue out and traced his life line. His breath hitched. She could swear his rich, brown eyes darkened.

Suddenly she was on him like white plastic on a Stormtrooper, shamelessly pressing against his body, groping and kissing him. He groaned, a good groan, cinched his arms around her waist and spun them until her back hit the wall of the elevator.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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47 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 5/27/12

  1. TruScorpio May 27, 2012 at 7:07 am #

    Hi there I came across your site while searching for other writers on wordpress.. Although you only give 6 sentences :( it sounds really good.. I kinda wanna know what happens after the elevator.. maybe we’ll find out a lil more next week *crossing fingers* Also If you get a moment I would love for you to check out my site as well.. comments and feedback would be greatly appreciated! Happy Writing :)

  2. Jess Schira May 27, 2012 at 7:22 am #

    LOL, love your storm-trooper analogy. Very creative. Good luck with your submissions!

  3. Joya Fields May 27, 2012 at 8:13 am #

    Love the “inner streak of boldness.” Says a lot in a few words. Thanks for sharing. :)

  4. A.S. Fenichel May 27, 2012 at 8:25 am #

    “white plastic on a Stormtrooper” LOL!!! That’s an awesome image. Great six.

  5. Donna Cummings May 27, 2012 at 8:27 am #

    I’m one of the lucky ones who got to read the entire story, and this was such a fun couple. I laughed again at the stormtrooper line — they’re so perfect together, these two. :) Fingers crossed for them while their story is on submission!

  6. Linda Morris (@LMorrisWriter) May 27, 2012 at 8:31 am #

    Ha! I love the stormtrooper image too. She must truly be all over him. Sounds like a fun story. Good luck with the submissions!

  7. Gem May 27, 2012 at 8:39 am #

    No sense in being shy when the moment says not. Really fun visual to start the morning. :)

  8. Cara Bristol May 27, 2012 at 8:59 am #

    That’s some heavy groping. Fun six.

  9. Elin Gregory May 27, 2012 at 9:34 am #

    There are some superb phrases here but it’s the Stormtrooper crack that made me smile. Very nice.

  10. Joyce Scarbrough May 27, 2012 at 10:06 am #

    Here’s hoping her inner boldness gets tapped a lot more often. In fact, I hope she opens up a keg! 😉

  11. Jenna Jaxon May 27, 2012 at 10:37 am #

    That’s going to be one steamy elevator by the time they reach their floor! I think he got his answer to “Do you want this?” LOL Great six!

  12. S. J. Maylee May 27, 2012 at 10:44 am #

    like white plastic on a Stormtrooper<–you just made this Star Wars junky's day :) Loved the sexy show and no tell. Yum.

  13. Julia Indigo May 27, 2012 at 10:47 am #

    What a way to start the morning! I’m barely out of bed, and read this…
    “Very nice, effective,” she says, panting.

    Good luck with the submission!!!

  14. K.E. Saxon May 27, 2012 at 10:55 am #

    Good thing there aren’t handrails in this elevator or…ouch! Great six! I absolutely LOVE the premise, the title, the humor–all fabbo! =D

  15. Jennifer Comeaux May 27, 2012 at 11:12 am #

    Whew! Hot six, Angela! My only suggestion would be for the second sentence – it didn’t read as smooth to me starting with “She.” I was thinking maybe “Her tongue darted out, tracing his lifeline, and his breath hitched.” Just a thought, but overall loved it! :)

  16. Kate May 27, 2012 at 11:53 am #

    “on him like white plastic on a Stormtrooper.” ROFL! I love your writing, Angela.

    • Angela Quarles May 27, 2012 at 12:17 pm #

      Thanks! I came up with that line months ago and was so happy to finally have a story where it would fit. 😀

  17. epbeaumont May 27, 2012 at 12:20 pm #

    Well, clearly we have mutual interest. :)

    Great six, and it’s fun seeing a cluster from the same story.

  18. Sue May 27, 2012 at 12:42 pm #

    Good scene. keep me posted

  19. Owllady/Marcia May 27, 2012 at 12:44 pm #

    What fun, Angela! I always like to see the lady go after what she wants.

  20. veronicascott May 27, 2012 at 1:27 pm #

    Wow, she’s not holding back! Loved the stormtrooper reference – very well done six!

  21. Jessica Subject May 27, 2012 at 1:57 pm #

    “like plastic on a Stormtrooper” LOL Love it! Great six! :)

  22. Mae Clair May 27, 2012 at 2:28 pm #

    The woman knows what she wants and isn’t shy about going after it, LOL. Hot scene!

  23. Dee Carney May 27, 2012 at 2:59 pm #

    Like white on a Stormtrooper? *giggle* Nicely done.

  24. Teresa Cypher May 27, 2012 at 3:12 pm #

    Hot! Whew…nice six, Angela! I loved this: “…white plastic on a Stormtrooper.” Had me chuckling :-) Good luck on your submission! Hoping the best for you :-)

  25. Carrie-Anne May 27, 2012 at 3:49 pm #

    I also loved the Stormtrooper analogy. I hope no one walks in on them in the elevator on another floor!

  26. Karysa Faire May 27, 2012 at 4:21 pm #

    Haha. Ditto everyone’s comment on the ‘Stormtrooper’ line. Fingers are crossed for ya!

  27. Karyn Good May 27, 2012 at 4:31 pm #

    Wonderful six! Very fun and sassy but emotive!

  28. Kate Meader (@KittyMeader) May 27, 2012 at 5:54 pm #

    I love the “good groan” line myself. There’s something very emotive about that phrase. Great six, Angela!

  29. Candice Bundy May 27, 2012 at 6:45 pm #

    Elevators are made for heavy groping! It brings out the risk of getting caught, after all. 😉 Good luck on your submission!

  30. Ryan Derham May 27, 2012 at 6:49 pm #

    I like a woman who can tap her inner boldness! Great six, Angela!

  31. sueannbowlingauthor May 27, 2012 at 7:38 pm #

    I hope nobody else gets on the elevator!

    • Angela Quarles May 27, 2012 at 8:17 pm #

      😀 You’ll have to read the story and find out 😉 I’m not sayin….

  32. Monica Enderle Pierce May 28, 2012 at 1:29 am #

    Now *that’s* passion! I’m glad she decided not to be shy. So much better this way, for all of us. 😉

  33. Jennifer Lowery May 28, 2012 at 8:15 am #

    Love the ‘good groan’! Awesome six! Good luck on the submission!

  34. Karla Doyle May 28, 2012 at 9:53 am #

    Love the title! And the elevator make-out session. 😉 Good luck on submission!

  35. Joanne Stewart May 28, 2012 at 10:38 am #

    Ooh. It’s getting hot in here. 😉 Sexy six!

  36. L.J. Kentowski May 28, 2012 at 10:40 am #

    Hahaha!!! Love the stormtrooper line! Great steamy 6, Angela!

  37. Jalisa Blackman (@J_M_Blackman) May 28, 2012 at 10:58 am #

    Ha! I’m with L.J. The Stormtrooper line is lovely. It’s a great smile-inducing nod in the midst of a hot moment, which I always love. Great rhythm here, Angela.

  38. Frank Fisher May 28, 2012 at 1:17 pm #

    Wow, good six! I can sense their feelings and am wondering what’ll happen next. You’ve made some bold, vivid descriptions here!

  39. Cate Masters May 28, 2012 at 2:12 pm #

    Such a great, strong voice in this snippet. Loved it.

  40. Lorraine Paton May 28, 2012 at 10:59 pm #

    Steamy 6! And, brilliant! I love the storm trooper reference. :) And tracing his lifeline with her tongue seems like a symbol – of what, I have no idea – but it is interesting to me. Best of luck with your submitting!

  41. Wildcat's Wife May 29, 2012 at 11:50 am #

    I like the opening sentence referring to the fact he’s not usually the aggressor. “seldom used.” So, this time, he tapped into his reservoir!! Nice six!

  42. sarahballance June 3, 2012 at 7:20 pm #

    I think she might want it. *grin* Holy WOW, this is hot!

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