Six Sentence Sunday – 3/18/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP tentatively titled MUST LOVE BREECHES, which is now out in query land!

Here’s my new pitch/logline: When a thoroughly modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies.  (You can see the other entries here.)

Since everyone’s been enjoying her ride in the curricle with Lord Montagu, I thought I’d pick up exactly where we left off last week. It seems appropriate too, since what he asks her in a bit is the Act One break/turning point. This is from Isabelle’s POV, and she and Lord Montagu are in a curricle (a type of carriage) in Hyde Park. She’s only been back in time for two days and he’s just called on her to ask her to go on this ride with him:

On the ride to the park, she had no idea what he expected, so she had kept quiet. But she also had a hard time keeping her seat, and more than once the jolting of the carriage bumped her against him. So this was why the young blades of the ton preferred driving a curricle. So that their ladies would accidentally brush against them. Or maybe to give the ladies an excuse to seek their beau’s protection, with a Pretend Squeal thrown in?

Without even looking at him, every movement he made registered in her consciousness, every tilt of the head to a passing male acquaintance, and a few darting glances at her.

As always I welcome constructive feedback. Thank you!

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53 Replies to “Six Sentence Sunday – 3/18/12”

  1. See, it’s scenes like this that I want to throw in people’s faces when they say Regency/Victorian/whatever time period stuff is too stuffy and restrained. It’s the restraint that makes it even more sexy, and you’ve proven that with your six!

  2. “Curricles were notorious for the accidents their drivers suffered.” I was looking for a picture, but the Wikipedia article reinforces her difficulty. A single-axle vehicle with two horses certainly doesn’t sound terribly stable!
    By the way I’m at my usual spot for SSS. Must have counted wrong.

  3. Without even looking at him, every movement he made registered in her consciousness, …

    This line says so much! This is a great six and I agree with others on your voice. It’s every well suited to historicals.

  4. I love how she’s an “expert” on this era anyway, but now she gets to live and breathe it. I also like how she’s looking at it in a scientific, fact-finding way, but at the same time totally getting hot and bothered over her escort. This is such a unique twist on a time travel storyline. Great six!!

  5. I love this book so much! This scene does an excellent job of showing how Isabelle is slowly becoming aware of Lord Montague, and is really quite sensual. It also does a god job of illustrating how different things are back in this time. Terrific job!

  6. I love the mix of old and new — “Pretend Squeal” tells us this is a modern and independent woman, even without the historical musings.

  7. Oh, very nice ride! My grandma once told me when my boyfriend and I were driving up to the mountains to be sure and take the curves. the way she cackled I figure I know what she meant.

  8. I love this. Great description. I felt like I was there with her. The thrill of the ride, the naughty little thrill of bumping into him. Great six.

  9. Time travel?! I’m IN! Awesome! And loved this: “Without even looking at him, every movement he made registered in her consciousness.” Been there! 🙂

  10. I love her awareness of him—very true to life. I’ve got to be honest here, Angela–I’ve never liked time travel novels, but I have loved every six you’ve posted from this novel, so I’m in. Sign me up. Where do I buy? 🙂

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