Six Sentence Sunday – 1/29/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP tentatively titled Must Love Breeches.

Here’s my new pitch/logline: When a modern girl finds herself stranded in 1834 London, she must find a way home while navigating the pitfalls of London society, resisting her attraction to a hunky lord, and ultimately having to decide when her true home lies.  (You can see the other entries here.)

Here we meet Lady Byron (Lord Byron‘s widow) and it’s just been announced that Lord Montagu has arrived to visit. Ada is her daughter (the future Ada Lovelace). The heroine (whose POV we are in) has had it with Lady Byron’s passive aggressiveness:

Lady Byron continued, “So kind of [Lord Montagu] to be solicitous, but then he should be since I am a close relation after all and one cannot be too solicitous when it comes to family. Is that not so, Ada? No, not at all.”

Good Lord. She wished Lady Byron’s embroidery needle would slip out of her fingers, whip around and stab the back of her hand. The woman was unbearable.

I want to thank all the commenters last week who helped me get my six sentences into a good rhythm. The comments were extremely helpful and enlightening and as some said, it was a good lesson in writing. Thank you!

To see snippets from others who are participating or to sign up yourself, visit here. And this week’s other time travel snippets are: Ginger Simpson.

Thank you to everyone who comes by and comments each week! Have a great Sunday!

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49 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – 1/29/12

  1. Gayle Ramage January 29, 2012 at 8:19 am #

    Heck, I think I’d travel back in time myself just to stab her with the needle, lol! Great snippet!

  2. Stephanie January 29, 2012 at 9:15 am #

    Heh, I see a little of Lady Catherine De Bourgh in Lady Byron. :)

    • angela quarles January 29, 2012 at 9:40 am #

      Actually I think she was worse than Lady Catherine, lol, and she really existed. Ever since I started my research on Ada I’ve felt sorry for her for having such a mother.

  3. Zee Monodee January 29, 2012 at 9:34 am #

    Lol, pompous isn’t she? :)

    • angela quarles January 29, 2012 at 9:41 am #

      :) Yeah, I don’t portray her in a very positive light.

  4. Skye Warren January 29, 2012 at 9:53 am #

    Hah, nice. No, I can’t say that I agree with the woman either.

  5. Kate Meader January 29, 2012 at 10:10 am #

    What a piece of work! And I love how she answers her own question.

  6. Ruthie January 29, 2012 at 10:13 am #

    Ha! Fun six. And “MUST LOVE BREECHES” — that’s new, isn’t it? I love it.

    • angela quarles January 29, 2012 at 10:15 am #

      Thanks! Yep, that’s the new working title, am trying it out for a bit to see how it sticks. And that’s a new pitch/logline…

  7. Krystal Wade January 29, 2012 at 10:24 am #

    You switch between the “old speak” and newer aged character so well. Well done.

  8. Liz Crowe January 29, 2012 at 10:41 am #

    a very well written six.

  9. K.E. Saxon January 29, 2012 at 10:51 am #

    Oh, Angela! That’s just prime! I absolutely adore your heroine. Great six!

  10. Carmen DeSousa January 29, 2012 at 10:54 am #

    I like this woman already.

  11. Jean Davis January 29, 2012 at 10:56 am #

    She sounds like she needs a good needle stabbing. An entertaining glimpse into your heroine’s thoughts.

  12. veronicascott January 29, 2012 at 10:59 am #

    Liked this very much, the heroine has spirit. Really get the flavor of what a bore Lady Byron can be! Terrific excerpt.

  13. Kate Warren January 29, 2012 at 11:13 am #

    Love the working title! For some reason I expected to read that the needle should stab Lady Byron in the back of her head. Maybe I’m just not as nice as your MC (whose name escapes me at the moment, I blame the cold medicine, though I completely remember Lord Hotstuff’s name).

  14. Cara Bristol January 29, 2012 at 12:17 pm #

    Such creative thoughts of irritation. Nicely done.

  15. Jasmine January 29, 2012 at 12:27 pm #

    I really love the humour in your snippets.

  16. sue January 29, 2012 at 12:34 pm #

    I like all the activity with the needle – that power would be fun if she could do that

    • angela quarles January 29, 2012 at 12:48 pm #

      wouldn’t it? Alas, she has no such powers… the time travel part is the only paranormal activity :)

  17. Karysa Faire January 29, 2012 at 12:45 pm #

    Good Lord! What a great snippet. I’d wish for the needle-stabbing, too!

    • angela quarles January 29, 2012 at 12:49 pm #

      Thank you! I just really do not like Lady Byron, can you tell?

  18. sueannbowlingauthor January 29, 2012 at 1:10 pm #

    Pompous is right–but it gives us a glimpse into her rather stiffling times, too.

  19. Steven Montano January 29, 2012 at 1:32 pm #

    Nicely written! I like her spunk!

  20. Patricia Green January 29, 2012 at 1:57 pm #

    I suspect we’ve all wanted to see a snot get poked by a needle a time or two. Good snippet!

  21. Amy Durham January 29, 2012 at 2:18 pm #

    Very nice six! Love the humor!

  22. Melynda Price January 29, 2012 at 2:26 pm #

    LOL! That’s funny, I can just picture it :)

  23. Gemma Parkes January 29, 2012 at 2:28 pm #

    Well written, l love the wicked, silent idea, about the needle slipping!

  24. jennajaxon January 29, 2012 at 2:32 pm #

    If the needle slipped we could hope for tetanus to finish Lady Byron off! LOL But we do need our nasty characters to give our stories color. She’s drawn very well in just these few lines. Great six.

  25. Cherie Marks January 29, 2012 at 2:34 pm #

    Mmm…hmm. Some people can be so frustrating. I like where the heroine is going with the embroidery needle. Great six!

  26. Ryan January 29, 2012 at 2:49 pm #

    This is great fun, Angela. Your characters are sincere and amusing, and the flow is just right. Great scene setting, too.

  27. Ginger Simpson January 29, 2012 at 2:49 pm #

    Thanks for the chuckle. How often have we thought such things when someone is such a boor? Love it. Can’t wait for more. Oh, I made a rhyme. :)

  28. themadwarlock January 29, 2012 at 3:20 pm #

    I love this six, you picked up the internal anger so well.

  29. sarahballance January 29, 2012 at 4:08 pm #

    OMG, this is hilarious! Fab six!

  30. Carly Fall January 29, 2012 at 5:34 pm #

    I’ve felt that way about a couple of people! Nice six, Angela!

  31. Sadie Hart January 29, 2012 at 6:10 pm #

    -rolls- I’m surprised she’s not wishing for the needle to aim for the eyes. She’s got more patience than me.

    And, I *love* the title! Must Love Breeches? Awesome!!!

  32. Vivien Dean January 29, 2012 at 6:55 pm #

    Ha, and how many of us have wished for that exact same type of skill? Great six!

  33. DeAnna Felthauser January 29, 2012 at 8:20 pm #

    LOL! Great six! I’ve wanted a few people stabbed with a needle before too, so I can empathize with her! 😉

  34. Lynne Murray January 29, 2012 at 10:26 pm #

    We definitely know what to think about Lady Byron–and she was a real person, such thoughts must often have occurred to those unfortunate enough to spend time with her. Not fun for them, but fun for us to read!

  35. Jean Marie Ward January 29, 2012 at 10:39 pm #

    Ooh, intriguing cast! Byron was hardly the most constant of men, but there was a good reason he was never home much. As you say, poor Ada. :-(

  36. E.D. Walker January 29, 2012 at 10:50 pm #

    The embroidery needle thing sounds good to me!

  37. Monica Enderle Pierce January 29, 2012 at 11:46 pm #

    Love your character’s fire. I think she’s gonna need plenty of it to cope with that old crone.

  38. Jennifer Lowery~Author January 30, 2012 at 6:04 am #

    LOL! Fantastic six! Thanks for sharing!

  39. Siobhan Muir January 30, 2012 at 10:25 am #

    I admit I was expecting the MC to do something a little more outrageous, but that wouldn’t have been in keeping with the times. Fun six, Angela. :)

  40. rebeccahartwriting January 30, 2012 at 10:41 am #

    Love a girl with pluck! Nice six.

  41. Dee Carney January 30, 2012 at 7:37 pm #

    HAHAHA! Too funny!

  42. Guilie January 31, 2012 at 7:06 am #

    Great snippet, Angela–loved the imagery of the needle, hehe. Thanks for sharing!

  43. J.A. Beard February 2, 2012 at 7:43 pm #

    Love the snar.

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