Six Sentence Sunday – 1/1/12

Today is #sixsunday where writers share six sentences from their work. I’ll share a snippet from my time-travel romance WIP. I currently have this out to Beta readers for feedback and hope to be in a position to query for agents in the new year. Here’s my working query hook for it: Isabelle Rochon has met the man of her dreams. There’s only one problem: he lives in a different century. 

From the second chapter, Isabelle Rochon is leaving the reenactment ball with Lord Montagu (Phineas) and Ada Lovelace. He’s baffled by her, and she’s still clueless that she’s traveled back in time. This is from his POV, hence the 19th century-sounding voice. (You can see the other entries here.)

Phineas turned back to Miss Rochon and held out his arm. “We will be happy to escort you to your carriage. It is warm for May, so I trust the short distance should not inconvenience you too much.”

Miss Rochon gave every appearance of mounting a protest. However, she shook her head instead and said something under her breath that sounded suspiciously like, “Whatever, dude.”

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Have a great Sunday and Happy New Year!

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31 Comments

  1. Super six, Angela! I especially love the last line. LOL!

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  2. I so want to know what happens.. :) I enjoyed reading this one, the last line put a smile on my face.

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  3. Hah, very cute! I’m not well-read with time travel, but this has me intrigued.

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  4. LOL Loved the ‘whatever dude.’ Definitely brings out that it’s a time travel romance right there.

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  5. Amusing six. Love the contrast in language.

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  6. Read read the sentences before I read your set-up and I caught the different right away. Great Six. I love time travel novels. They’re so much fun.

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  7. Love the “whatever, dude”. This sounds like a fun one :)

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  8. I like it! The last line makes me smile and says much more to come…terrific snippet.

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  9. Love this! He probably wondered what on earth a “dude” was..!
    Good luck with the queries.

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  10. Very nice. Best of luck with the queries. I think you have a winner here. Happy New Year!

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  11. The comic twist at the end was priceless: there’s a change in rhythm as well as the deliberate anachronism to make us laugh. Great six!

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  12. LOL! Yes, our language today would be quite cryptic to someone from the past. Love the humour in this!

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  13. lol! You had me hooked with the name Phineas and knocked me over with “whatever, dude”. Great six!

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  14. And past language is sometimes cryptic to us today. Love that she doesn’t realize that she’s in a different time.

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  15. LOL I love the humor at the end. Isabelle sounds like a cool chick :)

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  16. Ursula Grey

     /  January 1, 2012

    Excellent six! I love time travel and will look forward to reading this:-)

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  17. I would love to read this whole story in one go—may your querying period be quick and successful!

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  18. Cute last line. Very nice. :)

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  19. Nice. Can’t wait to see what happens when she can’t find her carriage. :-)

    BTW, thanks for posting about The Men of the Stacks calendar. LOVE the idea and the charity. I went and bought myself a calendar and will be posting about it on Tuesday.

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  20. Fun six, Angela. “Whatever, dude.” Great last line. :)

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  21. Great six, and I LOVE the ending!

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  22. Very clever way to illustrate time travel! I liked the voice in this too. Nice sample from your WiP, definitely leaves the reader interested in what happens next. :)

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  23. Nice use of humor and being in the hero’s pov creates an interest in where the story will go. Nice six!

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  24. Love it! Very cute-

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  25. Interesting premise. Love the difference in the language! Happy New Year to you!

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  26. Would love to have heard the reaction if she had said it. lol

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  27. LOL I love the clash of their cultural differences. :)

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  28. I love the contrasting dialogue. :)

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  29. Hey, Angela, thanks for stopping by last week! Sorry to be so late replying, but I’m glad I backtracked to this week because it’s always fun to see two different time periods clash together. Nice six!

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  30. Nice comparison between the eras. Gotta love those time-travels. Thanks for visiting my site today. :)

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